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I'm writing a story! :D It's about time I wrote another. I've already written the first few chapters, but that's because I've been doing it on deviant art. So if you want to read more, faster, watch me on dA! I'm no longer Xoren, I am now Ardann. Anyways, here's the plot; A girl named Kaitlynn (nicknamed Katie) and her sister Jamie get into a car crash. Kaitlynn dies, saving the other crash victims, and comes back to life as a dog that matched her human appearance almost exactly (Same blonde hair, blue eyes). Her new life's purpose is to protect and guard the life of a friend that betrayed her. I'd like you to rate it if that's okay. I love hearing other peoples's opinions on my work. Okay. So it's out of ten, one being the lowest, ten being the highest. Comments & Ratings: -coughnoneomgcough- Enjoy! ~De
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The Golden Retriever Chapter One The Betrayal
Kaitlynn's pencil seemed to dance across her paper. Her baby blue eyes looked up at the clock for what seemed to be the one hundredth time today. Ten more minutes until lunch. Ten more minutes until Katie would get out of school. Ten more minutes until she saw Travis.
Kaitlynn and Travis were best friends, and everyone knew it. They had known eachother since preschool, and ever since Kaitlynn had been falling for him, lately as hard as ever. She didn't think Travis liked her back though, because he had told her in the past that she was like a second sister to him, a less annoying one. Maybe he would think dating his sister would be all too weird. Suddenly a note was tossed onto her desk. Raising an eyebrow, she slowly grabbed it and unfolded it. It read:
"Katie I gotta tell you something, after class so wait for me.
- Angela"
Kaitynn rolled her eyes. What could she possibly want? Of all people Angela was her least favorite, for many reasons. She was annoying and continuously thought people were her friends. She just didn't get that when people run away, you aren't supposed to follow.
Then the bell rang. Kaitlynn quickly packed her things into her bag and tried to get away before she was seen by Angela. Just as she thought she was safe, she heard " Katie! Katie! Wait up!"
Kaitlynn groaned and stopped walking. She turned around angrily and glared at Angela. "What?" She spat.
" I wanted to tell you that Me and Travis are going out!" Angela held her books closer to her chest, a huge smile across her face. Her long brunette hair draping neatly down to her waist, her hazel brown eyes beaming.
Kaitlynn froze, her eyes widening. Her long, wavy blonde hair resting on her shoulders, dropped as well as her jaw.
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The Golden Retriever Chapter Two The Confrontation
'How could he? How could Travis do that to me? Doesn't he know?' Kaitlynn blinked, trying to take it all in. "W-w-wow. That's... Erm... Great Angela." Katie turned around and quickly walked out the school gates. She clentched her jaw tight as she saw Travis, hanging out under a tree with his buddies, Kaleb and Darius. Katie stormed over to them instantly, a scowl on her face.
Travis looked over Kaleb's shoulder, saw Katie and said "Hey Katie! How a-" he was cut off instantly.
"Don't Hey Katie me! I know about you and Angela." Katie shouted, the heat in her body rising.
Kaleb and Darius looked at eachother and backed away quickly. Travis looked at Katie eyes wide. "I'm sorry Katie, I just didn't think you would mind." Travis looked at her nervously, his gaze neary melting her.
Katie found herself staring at him, but quickly snapped back to reality. "Didnt mind?! Didn't mind?! I found out from Angela! Angela! Not you! I thought we were friends Travis. I really did...." She backed away.
"Katie don't be mad, please." Travis begged.
"Whatever." Katie snapped, walking away as Jamie pulled up in te white Toris car. She opened the door and climbed inside, instantly being greeted by her cheerful older sister.
"Hey kiddo! How was school?" Jamie asked, pulling out of the school's parking lot.
Katie, trying her best to not look out the window at Travis, muttered "Fine."
Jamie blinked and looked at her sister. "Fine? Just fine? Wow. What happened that's so fine?"
" Nothing." Katie said, getting annoyed. "Just keep driving."
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The Golden Retriever Chapter Three The Accident
Jamie shrugged her shoulders and continued driving. She turned a corner and drove onto a small paved road. Kaitlynn and Jamie's house was located farther off than a lot of the other houses. In order to reach it, you had to drive down the small paved road and turn a corner or two. It was a ten minute drive, but where they lived was worth it. A big farm on the lower plains of the mountains, three thousand acres. It and the road were well isolated from the rest of the town.
About 3 minutes had passed since the car had started on the road. Jamie looked out the rearview mirror and saw a small van. Not only did it seem a little too close, but the young female driving it continuously kept turning her head around to the backseats. Shrugging it off, she turned her attention back to the road infront of her.
A large semi truck was coming towards them, the driver's head was against the seat, eyes closed. The truck began to swerve back and forth. The driver still didn't wake.
Jamie instantly slammed on the brakes, and the semi truck began to tip. Just then, the van rear ended their tiny car, causing it to slide forward directly to the spot the semi truck was about to land.
Kaitlynn screamed at the top of her lungs and just as Jamie started to scream, the truck landed on top of the tiny Toris, crushing the car and the girls inside it.
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The Golden Retriever Chapter Four The Act Of Second Nature
Kaitlynn opened her eyes. She was sitting in the front seat of the car, her legs crushed by the semi truck. She scrunched up her face in agony, for the metal was digging into her skin. She looked over to her left, seeing her unconscious sister. Her eyes grew wide and she dragged her weak arms across the center consol and onto her sister's shoulder. "Jamie... Jamie?" she shouted, growing worried when her sister didnt answer.
Then Katie felt an urge. She felt an urge to get her sister out fast, or she wouldnt be able to make it. With that Kaitlynn slid her hands between the crushed dashboard and pulled her legs out. She glanced at the deep wounds, only for a second, then focused on her sister.
She crawled onto Jamie's lap, seeing the door open a crack from the impact. She layed on her back, feet towards the door. She kicked with all her might, panting with every kick. Then she paused for a moment, remembering the flashlight under the seat.
Reaching down, she grabbed it and began to bang it on the door handle, it broke off instantly. She smiled slightly, her face aching from the cuts and wounds cause by the windshield glass. She shoved the door open and climbed out. She turned around and grabbed her sister by her waist, then dragged Jamie out after her. She dragged her bleeding sister away from the chaos, checking to see if she was breathing. She was. Only slightly.
Katie panted heavily, tired from the drag. She had already bled out a lot of blood, showing where she dragged herself and her sister. She looked at the car wreck, her eyes blinking out the dust.
Kaitlynn then felt another pull, this time towards the semi truck. She reluctanly found herself walking towards it, back through the rubble.
The truck was tipped on it's side, the left door facing upwards towards the sky. She wrapped her hands around some bars of the truck and hauled herself up to the left door. It wasn't damaged like the rest of the truck. She yanked open the door with clumsy hands, shock setting in quickly. She gulped and reached down into the truck, her hands grabbing the truck driver by his underarms. With a huge heave she dragged him up next to her.
Still holding onto the man, she climbed back down and dragged him over next to her sister, much slower than before. The truck driver was breathing, but he too, was unconscious like Jamie.
Katie then looked over at the van, seeing no movement. Another pull. She started towards it, only to be stopped by the pain in her arms and legs. She screamed in horror, crashing down onto her knees, gripping her shoulder as if she had just been shot.
Knowing she still had another to save, she crawled over to the van, back again through broken glass and car pieces. Only the front of the car was broken, but the impact of hitting another car could have caused even death.
Seeing that the front doors were smashed, she pulled open the back doors. She was taken aback when she saw a little boy sitting in his carseat, eyes filled with tears. He was gripping his plastic mug as close to him as possible, his lower lip quivering. Katie looked at the front seat, seeing the boy's mother's body smashed between the airbag and the seat, eyes closed. Katie and the little boy were the only ones conscious.
Katie worked quickly now, her legs and arms becoming numb. She had lost far too much blood already, and was loosing more within the seconds. She pushed the airbag away from the mother and dragged her into the backseat. She unbuckled the little boy, and with pleading eyes said "Follow me." Her throat and mouth became very dry as she dragged the mother over to the truck driver and Jamie, both still unconscious. She rested the mother down and the little boy, cut up and bruised also, curled up next to her, staring wide eyed and teary at Kaitlynn.
Katie's body began shutting down as she layed on the road. Muscle spasms shook through her body, and she gave up. She looked at the little boy and whispered, "Tell the blonde girl over there that I tried to keep her and me alive." And with that she rested her head on the hot ground and closed her eyes. There she died.
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The Golden Retriever Chapter Five The Confusion
When Katie opened her eyes again, she was a few feet from the crash, on a small hill on the side of the road. She then saw Jamie's body, the truck driver's body, the mother's body, the little boy, and farther away than the rest, her body. Suddenly the ambulance arrived and crowded around the bodies, causing Katie's view to be blocked.
When the paramedics finally moved away, all the bodies were gone except hers.
She blinked a few times, confused. Why am i seeing my own body? Wait, if my body is over here then... She looked down at her feet, or what used to be her feet. In their place was four paws. Katie opened her mouth to shriek but instead, a high pitched whimper escaped her jaws. She widened her eyes and then she started backing away, her paw stepping in a small puddle. She whirled around and looked down at her reflection. Instead of a human body, she saw a dog's body. A golden retriever's body. She had the same blonde hair, that was now fur, and the same bright blue eyes. She shook her head, backing away again. No. No. No! I cant be a dog! I'm human!
She glanced back at the carnage the crash had caused. Fire fighters were putting out the final flames. The police were examining the blood trails, and a white sheet was being drapped over Katie's body by a paramedic.
Kaitlynn's eyes grew wide. "I'm dead?" She asked herself, as her ears pulled back. She dropped to the ground and rested her muzzle on her paws. Suddenly a voice boomed from behind her.
"Yes, you're dead. You would still be alive if you hadn't moved around as much as you did. You lost too much blood when you saved their lives. You should be proud." A large, jet black newfoundland growled as he stepped forward.
Katie whirled around and froze, seeing the other large dog. "Don't be afraid of me Katie. I'm here to help you." The dog spoke again.
"Who are you? How would- how could you help me?'' Kaitlynn asked, cocking her head slightly. She stepped forward, edging the newfoundland to continue.
The newfoundland's eyes gleamed with amusement. "My name is Jet. And when I say I can help you, I mean by telling you your new life's purpose."
"Life's purpose?''
"Yes. Your reason to live this new life. Your new purpose is to protect a boy named Travis." Jet chuckled, knowing that Katie knew Travis.
"What? Travis? Of all people to protect its" She gulped. "Travis?!"
"Easy Katie! The humans will hear you and come and investigate!" Jet barked back, trying to calm her. Once Katie calmed and sat down reluctantly, he continued. "I know Travis isnt your favorite person right now but you must try to protect him. It's your purpose in this life. Its the reason you came back."
"You don't know anything." she snarled and stormed away.
Jet sighed and followed her. "I'll lead you to his house, but you have to continue this on your own. I will be around town though, in case you need me." He barked. "Learn to forgive and forget. Its your fault you didnt tell him before."
Katie flattened her ears to her skull, knowing Jet was right. Then she grumpily followed him to Travis's house.
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6:12pm Aug 24 2011
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I love eet! <3 This is quite the interesting plot. I bet it'll turn out to be a very good story. It is so far, anyways. :D Keep writing! You're very good! c:
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4:10pm Aug 30 2011
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Oh my gosh! I loves it! You have great writing skillz :3 Do moar!
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6:12pm Aug 30 2011
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I saw a film like this once... i.e., car crash, man brought back to life as a dog, can't remember past that... Good so far, anyways. 83
Well now. I should... Probably put something intelligent here. At some point. Eventually. ... ... Screw it. HYE. ♥
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Thank you guys! Err, I've never seen that movie, I was studying afterlife and this popped into my head. Okay, three more chapters about to be posted. :D
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Chapter Six The Return Kaitlynn and Jet, trying to stay unseen, cut across the fields, towards town, instead of walking down the roads. Kaitlynn curiously looked up at her companion. Jet had on a straight face, his eyes locked on where he was walking. His jowls hung with small strings of slobber dripping off them.
Kaitlynn looked back towards the road, her ears bouncing with every step she took. She then cleared her throat, trying to break the awkward silence.
" So, er, Jet. If my purpose is to protect Travis, then what's your purpose?" She turned her head back to look at him, her long blonde fur clinging neatly along her slim body. Jet, still looking forward, spoke in a calm voice.
"To help you, by telling you your purpose."
Katie blinked, utterly confused.
"Wait, your reason for being revived is to tell me I have a purpose?" She raised something that seemed to be an eyebrow. Jet shook his head.
"Not just you. Other dogs as well."
"So wait, other dogs have purposes too?" Kaitlynn asked with a small tail wag. It made her slightly happy that she wasn't alone on this whole life's purpose thing.
"Yes, a lot of dogs have a purpose and it all relies on humans."
"So, what's another dog's purpose?"
Jet looked down at her, his stare hard. It caused Katie's ears to pin back once again.
"Thats none of your business Kaitlynn."
"But its not like I'm ever going to meet them!" Katie whined.
Jet sighed and turned his head back to the direction they were going in. They were a block away from Travis's house, and Jet was highly eager to drop Katie off and leave. "Fine. I recently helped a fifteen year old boy. His name was Cody. He died because of an abusive mother. He came back to life as a doberman, and his purpose was to help out a five year old boy named Chase. His mother left him with his father and his father began to drink a lot becoming abusive. Lets just say Cody is keeping Chase safe from his dad's hits."
Katie blinked. Wow. Abusive parents. Now I feel really lucky that i just died on accident.
As they walked up Travis’s driveway, Jet looked down at Kaitlynn.
"Listen. This is as much as I can do for you. You're on your own from now on."
"But how do keep Travis safe?" Kaitlynn asked.
"Simple. Become his pet.'' Jet replied, backing down the driveway.
" How?" Katie asked frustratedly.
"Figure it out. By the way, if your blue eyes don’t give away the fact that your paranormal, your attitude will. Try acting like a dog." Jet called back as he trotted around the corner of the long driveway.
Katie growled under her breath and sat down in the shade of the house. She hung her head and began to think. How am I going to be his pet? Then again, he has always had a soft spot for animals. Katie smiled, remembering the siamese cat Travis showed her when they were in the fourth grade. She had come over to his house and was greeted by the friendly cat. Travis had said he had found it in a bush on his way home from school one day, and begged his parents to keep it. They reluctantly agreed and Travis named it Ruth, after the famous baseball player Babe Ruth. It had been the best cat Kaitlynn had ever met.
Then an idea hit her. When Travis comes outside, I'll act like an abandoned dog! He'll feel sorry for me and beg his parents to keep me! Genius! Katie smiled to herself, for her plan was indeed genius.
Then she heard the front door open. Quickly, she vanished behind a few trash cans. She poked her head out from between them, opened her mouth and tried to smile as Travis walked outside with a rubbish bag slung over his shoulder. As Travis opened a trash can lid, Katie let out a small whine. Travis froze and looked down at his feet, seeing a blonde muzzle sticking out from between the two trash cans.
He bent down and found himself face to face with a beautiful dog. A golden retriever dog. He smiled.
"Hey girl. You lost?"
He asked, holding his hand out for her to sniff. Katie rubbed her head on his palm. Sure, she was angry with him for dating Angela, but how could she stay mad at her best friend?
Travis found himself holding his breath. A golden retriever with blue eyes? Travis shook himself and scratched behind the retriever’s ears. He had to have this gorgeous dog.
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Chapter Seven The Truth
Kaitlynn licked Travis's hand once more and bounded out from behind the trash cans. She sat down in front of him and offered her paw, a grin spread across her face. Travis grinned and took her paw, shaking it as if she were human.
"You’re pretty smart for a stray." he commented and let go of her paw. Then he reached up and scratched her chin.
Katie closed her eyes and play growled softly. That feels good. She thought as her tail thumped the concrete ground.
Travis laughed and stood up. He grabbed the trash bag and tossed it into the silver trash can, then he looked back down at the stray. He patted her head and said;
"I gotta go now." Then he turned around and headed back inside.
Katie frowned. What? He’s supposed to take me with him! She barked rapidly and raced after him, nudging his hand with her snout.
Travis looked down and chuckled. "No girl, you need to stay. Mom wont let me keep you."
Katie whined and sat down, cocking her head to the side. She raised her paw and let it rest on his shin, whimpering. Travis couldn't help but smile. "Alright, fine. I'll ask, but if I can't then I can't. Got it?" He asked raising his eyebrow.
Katie jumped to her paws. She wagged her tail furiously and ran in circles around him. Yes! Yes!
Travis laughed. "Okay okay!" He rubbed her head and patted his thigh, beckoning her to follow. Katie trotted after him.
Travis opened the front door and held it open as the golden retriever padded inside. He led her through the living room and into the kitchen, where Mr. and Mrs. Parker, Travis's parents, were sitting on the couch. As they stepped through the door, Mrs. Parker looked up from the floor, her cheek tear stained. Her long brunette curls which always rested neatly on her shoulders and bounced with life as she walked, were limp and lifeless. Mr. Parker had his arms wrapped around her. Rylee, Travis's five year old sister, sat on her father’s knee, her lower lip quivering.
Rylee and Kaitlynn were also close. They went way back, both of them teaming up and pulling pranks on Travis. They had great times together, almost as much fun as Travis and Katie had, even though Rylee was about twelve years younger.
Travis stopped in his tracks. "M-mom? Whats wrong?" He asked, his eyes clouding with worry.
Mrs. Parker sniffed looked back down at the floor, her hair hiding her face from her son. She shook her head and walked quickly out of the room, not wanting to tell her son such bad news. Katie, who was standing next to Travis, pinned her ears back. She knew why they were crying. They were crying for the loss of her life.
Travis blinked as his mom walked away. He looked at his dad and asked in a pleading voice.
"Dad... Why are you crying?'' His eyes flickered in pain and frustration, not knowing what was hurting them so badly.
Mr. Parker looked up from the kitchen sink and stared sadly at Travis. He ran his hand through his hair and finally spoke.
"Katie is dead, Travis. Jamie and her were in a car crash. She lost too much blood, but she saved the other victims. Everyone lived but her. Jamie is in a minor comma, but is expected to wake up in about a day or two. The security cameras caught it all. She died a hero."
Travis shook his head, eyes wide. He backed away slowly.
"No. No. No! You're lying! All of you! She's not dead. Katie cant be dead!" He shouted running out of the room. He ran to his room, Katie running after him, the door swinging open. He slammed it shut and collapsed onto his bed. She can't be dead. I never got to tell her. I never got to tell her that I was sorry, that I broke up with Angela for her. I’m so sorry Katie. I messed up. I’m sorry. I’m so sorry..."
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Chapter Eight The Welcoming
Kaitlynn stood frozen at Travis’s ran door. She felt Rylee and Mr. Parker's eyes burning into her fur, and she pinned her ears back. She scratched at the door and whined. The door opened, and she trotted in. Then Travis closed the door and flopped onto his bed. She crawled over to his bed where he lay, his face buried in his pillow. She listened to his muffled apologies, and put her paw on the edge of the bed.
"Travis! Its okay! Im fine! I forgive you!" she barked, getting frustrated when he continued talking to himself. What? He doesn’t understand me? Oh, come on Katie don’t be so stupid. Of course he doesn’t understand you! Your a dog for Pete's sake!
She nosed his arm gently and Travis turned his head to look at her. His eyes were red and puffy, his cheeks stained with tears. One last tear rolled down his cheek. He sniffed, and sat up, wiping his eyes. He then froze, blinking twice, wondering of he was crazy. When he looked at the golden retriever, he saw Katie looking at him, with those same glowing blue eyes.
After his third bl ink, Katie was gone, and in her place was a blonde dog. Katie's eyes were still there. He frowned, utterly confused. Then he shrugged it off and scratched behind the dog's ear.
Kaitlynn closed her eyes and her tail thumped the carpet ground. Gosh, that feels good... The corners of her mouth rose up in a smile, her ears pinned back, not in fear, but in happiness.
Travis laughed at her ex pression.
"So you like that girl?" he asked quietly, still not over his previous crying session.
Katie opened her eyes and licked his hand, her tail wagging more fiercely now. Well I’m glad to be making him happy. I'd rather him forget about me rather than have him crying all day.
Travis, still smiling, moved his hand from her ear to her chin. Then Mr. and Mrs. Parker walked in with frowns on their faces. They looked at Kaitlynn, confusion on their faces. Mr. Parker pulled out Travis's desk chair and sat down on it, facing his son and the dog. Mrs. Parker took a seat on the bed next to Travis. Rylee stood in the doorway, listening carefully.
"Trav, where did you get the dog?'' Mr. Parker asked, raising an eyebrow.
Travis looked down at Kaitlynn, then back up at his father. Katie’s ears flew forward.
"I found her outside dad. She is a real sweet dog, and she seems pretty smart."
Mrs. Parker cleared her throat.
"You cant keep this dog Travis. Too much is going on right now. Maybe you should start out with a puppy anyway. You've only had experience with cats, not dogs."
Travis's eyes grew wide.
"No mom, dad. I don’t want a puppy. I want this dog. I don’t want any other one. And I already named her Molly." He patted Katie's head and Katie smiled. Travis would name me that, after the frog we caught when we were five.
Travis's mother shook her head, and his father spoke up.
"No means no."
That was when Katie took matters into her own paws. She trotted up to Mrs. Parker and layed her head on her lap. She looked up with her loving eyes at her. She let a whimper escape her mouth and Mrs. Parker couldn’t help but scratch her head. She smiled slightly and said;
"She is sweet... and cute..."
Mr. Parker's eyes grew wide. " Oh no. Don’t fall for it Annabell."
Mrs. Parker giggled, and looked up with a smirk on her face.
"Too late." She said with a grin.
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11:46am Sep 3 2011
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I plan on reading the chapters later, but I read the plot! I like the idea! I've never been one to really like dog stories, but it sounds very interesting. :PPPP!
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Thank you! I hope you read it soon!
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8:43pm Sep 3 2011
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this sorta reminds me of the book a dogs purpose. Its where a dog has four lives and they are all for protecting this one man till he dies.
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4:33pm Sep 5 2011 (last edited on 4:33pm Sep 5 2011)
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DE. I rate it 10000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000. Oh. Ten was the highest? Oops.
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4:56pm Sep 5 2011 (last edited on 4:57pm Sep 5 2011)
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I'm reading that book now. Er...re-reading it anyway. Best book ever! :) Your story I give a ten-it looks like it will be really good.
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8:44pm Sep 5 2011
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This is awesome. O.O
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