1 in the Morning

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Outsane	9:38am May 18 2009
Normal User Posts: 2,148	1 in the Morning Awake at 1 in the morning. Tired. My brain stopped at twelve. But still I write. These words wanting to be Weaved. 1 in the morning. Directions on the pill bottle. Contents strewn across the nightstand Crawling across the floor. I've become dependent. Addicted No, I'm not. 1 in the morning. Just me. Was once 2 at night. He left me, yet again. What losers I attract. 1 in the morning. I'm alive still. Awake, thinking. Writing to you these thoughts. Pursuing the bliss of sweet, sweet Slumber. 2 in the morning. Go to sleep. � � Yep. Wrote this early this morning. I actually like it. o 3o'
Scaramouche	1:07am May 19 2009
Normal User Posts: 13	Very interesting. I like the way the sentences are broken up, it really contributes to the feel of the poem. The stuttering train of thought in the early hours. I think you could have used a better word than losers though. It just seemed a little out of place for me, but then, that's only my opinion. Good job!
Outsane	3:43pm May 19 2009
Normal User Posts: 2,148	I had another word there, but edited it to accomodate the site rules. lol.
renshinto	7:35pm May 19 2009
Normal User Posts: 2	This is really nice. Simple, yet complex. I like the repetative phrase, also as the ti tle. I write like that too XD Must be great to be awake at one in the morning. haha

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