Life. What can I say? Now that I moved in with my dad, John, I don’t believe it has miracles anymore. I moved in with him because of my mom.  She had met a new guy and she completely forgot about me. I no longer was in her life. So once I got a job, I ended up raising enough money to buy myself a one-way plane ticket to live with John.    

This was only the beginning.

Chapter 1

It messed it up. Sorry it looks funny. :/

That's my prolouge and part of chapter 1.

Okay. I NEED it to be criquted! Or however you spell it. I NEED it to be!

And don't just tell me it's like Twilight. Cause it's not. It's just this first part. When I fully done with it, I'll change it so you Twilight-fangirls don't nag me.

Its interesting so far. What is the narator's name? -curious-

Whenever possible try to avoid using actual numbers unless you want a specific effect with them.

Personally I need more written to give an actual critique xD  could say a lot like a more in depth deion of things and whatnot but I don't know whether you're going to add them later or not.

SO MOAR PLZ.

Lol. Thank everyone.

Dragonstar: Zanna. Her name gets used farther in.

Umm....Raru. Thanks. :) Here's more:

There was only one seat open.  And it was next to a girl with jet black hair and pale skin. She wore jeans and a light green shirt. I shuffled over to the seat and slid down.

“Hi,” I hear in my ear. I glance sideways. The girl had put the book down she was reading and talked to me.

“H-hi,” I stammer.

“You’re going to Port Angeles?” she asks.

“Well, kind of. I’m actually driving down to Forks.”

“Really?! Me too!”

“Oh. Nice.”

“Why are you going there?” She’s interested in my life?

“To live with my dad, John.”

“Last name Hawk?”