How to Fly


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Honeybee

2:05pm Aug 16 2010 (last edited on 5:00pm Aug 17 2010)

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First take a skip, three hops, and a bound. Then stop. Feel the ground beneath your toes, and feel the urgent need to escape gravity’s shackles. Caress the dirt and mud mush beneath your toes before scooting forwards into the emerald cloud of gra-ss, tantalizingly soft.

Next, take a look around, especially up. Stare at the twisting branches of the willow at the river bend, it’s leaves tethered to the earth from their accompanying fingers. Then glance at the sky—careful not to beautify the sun too long—and watch in awe as the twisting cathedrals of cumulonimbus dance in a non-stop aerial waltz.

Finally, look down at yourself, at your sullied jeans with gra-ss stains, the Reduce, Reuse, Recycle shirt you wore just for this occasion.

 

There. You’ve flown.

 

 

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It's been a while since I wrote something that turned out the least bit well. And in this, I followed the advice of a friend (I hope I did it right) and tried not to bully the words.

This is an unedited piece, and I plan on fixing it up in a bit. Comments get you a prize. ;)




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Fluffy88999

2:07pm Aug 16 2010

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Lolz, amazing Russ XD



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haleyhorror

2:09pm Aug 16 2010

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I really like it. Especially the part about escaping gravity's ties. 
Fireelf

2:09pm Aug 16 2010

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I don't want a prize LoL

This is very pretty, it does need some editing to make it flow a little better, although try not to be too harsh with the editing, you probably already know it is really easy to over edit something when it only needs a tweak or two.






Epona

7:59pm Aug 16 2010

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Wow! Incredibly awesome! 

Especially since I didnt actually fly, rather imagined it.

 

...Or thats what I got from it, anyways... 




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MaximumRide15

12:35pm Aug 17 2010

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really good. a little harsh on the editing. i actually wish i could fly. most of my storied have to do with flying though

 

Honeybee

5:01pm Aug 17 2010

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o____o Maximum Ride, how can it be harsh on the editing when A) You didn't see the original and B) I could count the words edited on one hand?



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