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Shadowwolf96	6:53pm Jan 5 2011 (last edited on 5:40pm Jan 6 2011)
Normal User Posts: 3,002	Shadow is reading Romeo and Juliet in her English cla.ss. She thinks Romeo is a deranged stalker <3, but she had to write an as.sigment for the cla.ss so she wrote a poem about Romeo saying this to Juliet. Please Comment. ~ Juliet Sweet and gentle Juliet How can you be a Capulet? You are the keeper of my heart The one whom I shall never part With trembling lips You cry my name And begin this frightful, dangerous game Our side of love Us soaring Doves And Theirs of Hate That bars our love in their Gates But Juliet, I fly to you Though I am a Montague Our love will shine Though both, we die But one last message I must weave Before our fate takes its leave Oh Juliet, I love you true I only wish to be with you. <3 Please do not steal ;( Current Goal: Hatch a Black and Albino Shaefu. Get all Dye Kit Color Shaefu. 2 Dyes so far and 4 Shaefu Hatched. Thread up in Ads if you want to see what I'm selling.
cobychika	5:43pm Jan 6 2011
Normal User Posts: 3	I like it =] you did good
KizzyCannon	5:43pm Jan 6 2011
Normal User Posts: 359	wow, I think it's really good, I could never write something like that :P And don't bother giving me tu if this is the first post Clickeh~
Shadowwolf96	5:56pm Jan 6 2011
Normal User Posts: 3,002	Thanks so much guys. <3 I was so embara.ssed when my English teacher read it in front of my cla.ss and then my friend told me that he read it to their cla.ss, too. XD Current Goal: Hatch a Black and Albino Shaefu. Get all Dye Kit Color Shaefu. 2 Dyes so far and 4 Shaefu Hatched. Thread up in Ads if you want to see what I'm selling.
Blackrose19429	4:04pm Jan 8 2011
Normal User Posts: 50	it's good =] just And begin this frightful, dangerous game Our side of love Us soaring Doves And Theirs of Hate the "us soaring doves" doesnt really make sense or flow but other than that it's really good <3 i do name searches for 175k per name =] rmail for my offer Click Me!
Shadowwolf96	4:09pm Jan 8 2011
Normal User Posts: 3,002	Black: I was hoping people would see sense in that. He's saying they have their side of love. They are soaring doves, but I see how that might not make sense. I guess the flow doesn't work too well either. I'll probably work on it a bit more and tweak a few things XD Thank you for your comment <3 Current Goal: Hatch a Black and Albino Shaefu. Get all Dye Kit Color Shaefu. 2 Dyes so far and 4 Shaefu Hatched. Thread up in Ads if you want to see what I'm selling.
Wishbelle	7:42pm Jan 30 2011
Normal User Posts: 2,158	-cries- I was seriously crying when I read it... I love romeo and Juliet .
Elainie	7:59pm Jan 30 2011
Normal User Posts: 200	It's good--better than I can do. However, Romeo did not speak like that. So I would recommend using "thy, shalt, thou, etc." instead of you, we, etc. It would really seem like he wrote it then.
innagong	9:26pm Feb 4 2011
Normal User Posts: 4,914	I'm liek so stealing this for my CW as.signment. Flashbacks, warm nights, Almost left behind. Suitcases of memories, Time after time. ლ(╹◡╹ლ)

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