Chapter 1: New Werewolf.

       Okay let's get the info over with. My name is Akila Monteik and I used to live in Wasington D.C. I have two sisters. My sisters are Karissa and Krystal. Just to tell you...... I'm a werewolf. Don't be afraid. Me and my family aren't harmful at all.

       "Akila, stop your music and your writing. We're here!"Krystal and Karissa said to me.

      You're probably wondering where 'here' is. Well 'here' is a little town named La Push. The only place where werewolves can roam. This is also the only place with werewolves in the whole Olympic area.

((There's more to the chapter but I'll do that after you tell if you like it or not.))

((The rest of the chapter.))

     I saw this guy who is perfect for Krystal. He's also a werewolf. Suddenly, I see a flash. Then I smell....... A VAMPIRE!

     "Hello, I'm Alice. Alice Cullen. And yes I'm a vampire."Alice exlaimed.

     "Wow, I'm Akila Monteik, and yes I'm a werewolf."I giggled.

     Then I saw this really H-O-T guy. Who's a werewolf. "Who's that?"I asked Alice.

     "Who? Oh, That's Jacob Black. He's also a werewolf. Don't make him mad. He warned me already about it."She explained

     I walked over to him "Hey, I'm Akila Monteik. I just moved here."I told him."

     "Oh hey. I'm Jacob Black. How are you?"He asked with the sweetest voice ever. "Can I show you around?"

      "Sure."I said.

((Thanks kewie!))

Chapter 2: My New Boyfriend.

     This is my favorite hymn:

           Jesus! Lover of my soul,
           Let me to thy bosom fly,
           While the nearer waters role,
           While the tempest is still high;
           Hide me, O my savior, hide.
           Till the storm of life is past,
           Safe into the haven guide;
           O recieve my soul at last!

       I work at the youth group here. I didn't know that Jacob always came. He also had long hair!

       "Hi, I'm Carlisle Cullen. Also known as Dr. Cullen. And kown as father."He said.

       "Hi, I'm Akila Monteik. I'm also a werewolf. I spend my me time around vampires. I like vampires but Alice scared me!"

       "She tends to do that alot."

       "Akila! This is Jasper. Well my Jazzy!"

       "Hey Alice. Hi Jasper. What's your power?"

       "I can controle emotions. Except my brother's wife, Bella. She can block everything."

       "Bella? What's her Maiden name?"

       "Isabella Swan."

       "We were in the same middle school. She was my best friend!"

((No It's a story I made up. It's like a fanfiction.))

 I think its okay~ as a fanfiction. I'm not quite sure where your going so far with the second chapter but from the what is written in the first and the ti
tle of the second I can only guess.....which I think I have an idea of where but I'm hoping I'm wrong (I like being surprised).

 What you have so far is fairly well written and if you do post more I would love to read it. Over all I like it ^^

I too agree that your fanfic moves kind of fast. Are the chapters supposed to be so short, or is it going to be a short fanfic?

Also, if you ever need an editor, because I spotted a few spelling errors, you can always ask me. I'm up for any challenge. XD

Other than all that, I like it. Good job!

Its great! And this is the banner Kanna made!

I know! But thats not what Renidi looks like, he like a werwolf from twilight. But thats al Kanna could get.