Unhinged [A Novel]


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Lore

5:21pm May 19 2010

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Eh, hello. I am working on writing a novel called "Unhinged"; I really need some critiques and comments on it.

 

 For a little background... it is told in the perspective of a prestigious male doctor who encounters a befriends a schizophrenic murderer and tries to protect her. Here are the URLs for chapters one and two:

http://lethal-apple.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d2o686u

http://lethal-apple.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d2oyxds

 

I seriously need help on these, please. ;~;

Thanks.

 



NightmareDream

8:39pm May 24 2010

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Very good. I like it. Though it's rough [like detail could be added, things need to be slowed down] I think the plot is good and well developed.
Lore

6:15pm May 29 2010

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Thank you; and yes, it is rough. This version is but a rough draft!
Lore

12:08pm Jun 4 2010

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Up. :3
NightmareDream

9:11pm Jun 19 2010

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Bump ^_^
EmoRotweiler

10:34pm Jun 24 2010

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amazing. simply amazing. cannot wait for the fourth chapter.


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