I grabbed his hand, running down the hallway. The soft, yet firm sound of my bare feet tapping against the floor was the only thing that broke the silence. I pulled him into the old science room. Luckily, no cl*censored*es were going on in there at the time. "We need to talk," I said quietly. I had just got out of gym, so I was sopping wet. My hair dangled over my face.

"We do need to talk," he said taking his hand from mine. He put one hand on each side of the wall around me, trapping me there. "You're one of them too, aren't you?" His eyes burned into mine.

I gulped, my cheeks red hot. "What are you talking about?" Jake was my best friend, but I knew that we had more in common than just our favorite T.V. shows. "I wanted to know how you swam so fast this morning, you were like a streak." I had to come up with a lie.

"No, you don't want to know that." He put my hand near his face, then placed my index finger between his teeth, an unspoken challenge. He knew what I was and I knew what he was now.

"Okay, you got me." I pulled my finger from his mouth. I didn't know what to do. I was stuck in a room with him, and he could do anything to me. I really need to start thinking things through more.

"Look," Jake said taking a few steps away from me. His face elongated to form that of a bear's. I gasped, then I found myself changing too. Before I knew it, he was a bear, and I was a wolf. He changed back, and I changed back too. "You see?"

"Yes," I said swallowing something that felt like it was stuck in my throat, "I see." I wrapped my arms around him, crying. I finally found someone else, like me. I had proof too. He grabbed my hand and pulled it up to his mouth again. He kissed it softly then let it drop to my side.

"See you tomorrow, Lillie," he said walking out the door.

I smiled, something unusual for me. He liked me. I ran my fingers through my wet hair and let out a laugh of relief. The bell rang and I headed outside. The bright light of the sun made me squint as I walked through the lobby. I pushed on the double doors, forcing them open. I walked through the parking lot to my car. I opened the back seat and slipped on my shoes. I closed the door and opened the driver's side door. I sank down in the seat before fumbling the keys out of my purse. I shoved the key into the side of the steering wheel and turned it. The car jolted to life and began moving.

((I will write more if I get people to comment on this!))

hmm.. It's a well written scene, but I think that maybe it needs a prologue or maybe something to explain the relationship between the characters beforehand... In this scene you mention how they are best friends and all but I think that maybe you should write about what they were like together before they figured out they were the same.

and in this scene you make it sound like she has been alone with her shifting powers for a long time "I finally found someone else, like me." But I think you need to make the reader feel how long it has been for the character and make the readers feel emotions towards the characters. I also believe that this piece of work seems more like something that would go like a quarter way through the story, rather than at the beginning, like I am as suming it is now?

And in the last paragraph, you do a lot of "I, I, I" (At the start of each sentence). I don't think you need to go into such thorough detail into her walking to the car, getting into it and starting it. But if you do want to put so much detail (Which is fine) I think you should try and make it more intriguing for the reader and vary your sentences more so as to give the writing more life.

Hope I helped :) Keep writing, even if people don't comment, It sounds interesting and you could really turn it into something if you tried :)

SerenityMist xx