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11:01am Feb 6 2010 (last edited on 2:33pm Feb 8 2010)
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11:01am Feb 6 2010
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Will add soon...Got to go shovel.. HAHA
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8:31pm Feb 6 2010
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that sounds really good. i def want more!
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10:52pm Feb 6 2010
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i agree!!! I love how you wrote through the "bad guy's" point of view. I did that, too, but it was just a quick one-shot. More please!
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8:53am Feb 7 2010
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Ha ha! Thanks! I'll write more!
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7:46pm Feb 7 2010
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7:51pm Feb 7 2010 (last edited on 5:33pm Feb 24 2010)
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CHAPTER 2 Of course, I was going to murder her anyway. Her brown eyes widened with fear and she let out a bloodcurdling scream. And that's when I lunged. "I warned you," I whispered, I didn't wait for an answer. My instincts took over.
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8:17pm Feb 7 2010
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Really good!!!! Why did he kill the woman? (i know your probably going to explain it later, but I'm just aching to know :D) Write more
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11:17pm Feb 7 2010 (last edited on 11:25pm Feb 7 2010)
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Okey,seriously? Please pick up a book right now and look through the pages.Have you ever seen a chapter thats barely even 50 words?(except for like a picture book for kids) as if its not enough,you make like five threads for five other stories which only have 50 words written to them. I believe everybody would like it more if you'd just focus on one.
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1:39pm Feb 8 2010
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excuse me, you can't tell her how long she has to write it. Sometimes people get bored writing the same thing. BTW, that's really rude. :/
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2:03pm Feb 8 2010
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I personally think that you should write more per chapter. Content is important in a story. :) Also, use a wider range of vocabulary, and describe the scenes more, and also the characters. Just add meat to the plot, basically. ^_^
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2:23pm Feb 8 2010
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Ok. Let's get this straight. I am a human. I also live in a family with 6 people. I barely have time to brush my hair in the morning, rather than write an 1000 word chapter. If you have a problem with my lack of time, Rmail me. And I will know that you are being extremely rude. Theyellowflash, you say pick up a book right now and look though the pages. I will let you know that James Patterson has 1 PAGE chapters, and he is one of the greatest authors that has ever lived. He is also a billionire. So if you called him up right now and said,"Your chapters are to short." He would probably sue you. Good for him. And, I am not writing a story for children. Do you think killing people is suitible for young people? When you were small, did your mother read as a bedtime story, a murder novel? I hope not. If I read this to-be novel to my 3 year old brother, he would probably never step foot out of our house agian. I am not trying to be rude. However, your words scream rudeness. I can *censored*ure you that I can get many people to back me up on this. To me, you are not being sensible or kind in any shape or form. Have a nice day.
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2:53pm Feb 8 2010
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stop picking on her, seriously! Dont you have anything better to do? but the chapters might seem better if they were longer. im not trying to sound mean by any means, or picking on you at all, its just easier flowing. you dont have to post the whole chapter at once, either. you could just post parts at different times. But its still really good :)
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4:10pm Feb 9 2010
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Sorry guys. My mom said that I'm not allowed to write on this anymore. Bye. :-(
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12:16am Feb 15 2010
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"Monsters are real. Ghosts are too. They live inside us and sometimes they win." ~Stephen King |
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12:21am Feb 15 2010
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What Flash said isn't rude, it's just blunt and straight to the point. Unlike most of us, he doesn't sugar coat things.
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12:44am Feb 15 2010
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she,chance,she xD; but yeah,thanks for sticking up for me anyway and lol. I never said youre writing a kiddie book.i never said you have to sacrifice your free time for writing. and ive never heard of James Patterson,but let me ask you this: does his chapters have less than fifty words in them?Doubt it.He probably also pops out those chapters like babies and has billions of them per a book. What i meant was that when creating a whole thread,it becomes your responsibility. Dont just post one cuz you felt like writing some crap. Posting a thread for this one story makes people think that you have a dedication to write more and more,actually continue it. If you do so,then at least try giving people some point of looking at this few millions of pixels that create your story. make it so thats its worth-while gawd. i should really be practicing piano or going to school now :c |
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12:54am Feb 15 2010
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Sorry, Flash. But seriously, people are so immature about things. Hey, Flash, can oyu do me a favor and read my story??
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6:35am Feb 15 2010
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I guess i could, but i dont usually like it when people beg for it randomly, especially not on other peoples threads :c also,i checked the Patterson dude,he doesnt seem to be doing so well. At least,so says the heavy criticism he had received. Being popular n rich and being good are two different things. its just like pageviews on DA :D some really crappy drawing guys have over even 40k,but that only makes them popular,not master-drawers. |
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1:31pm Feb 15 2010
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OK. James Patterson is a famous, rich, accomplished author. He is not an idiot. He is doing extremely well. I will write whatever I want on this thread- because it is mine. I started it, so I can write it. Please don't critize me and my writing. Just post if you like my writing-not about how big the chapters are. James Patterson's chapters CAN be about 50 words, like it or not.
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