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6:05am Jan 28 2011 (last edited on 4:17am Feb 15 2011)
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So as the ti
tle says I am in need of a writing partner.
I have never done anything like this before so I would like to know if the partner is usually paid tu for this or not and how much if so.
As some of you may know, I started a story not long ago and didn't finnish it. This is not that story. I was about to post the next chapter when I thought of another story that ties in with some of the ideas from the old plot, however, most of it is different.
I have random ideas for the story that I hope my new writting partner will help me sort out: Main Characters: 1. Ven and Van (Identical Twin Princes of Xanthitar)
2. Yuin (the queen)
3. Tsyoil (the king)
4. Utsia (i don't know what her role will be in the story, yet) Plot: There are many, many worlds throughout the universe. Too many to count, too many to even pretend knowing the exact number of them.
Master Aueti spent his whole life trying to understand each world as best he could, including every living thing on them.
One thing he learned was that Xanthitar was in the exact middle of all the worlds. The rest of the worlds surrounded theirs in a comlete circle that went out as far as he could see.
Another thing was that Xanthitar was the only world, which he discovered, that had a variety of species. For instance, one world inhabited Dragons.
The last thing he learned was that Xanthitar was the biggest world. Their world was at least double the second largest world Master Aueti discovered.
Using his knowledge, Master Aueti created portals that went to every world he discovered. Next, he made hidden portals in each world that went to all of the other worlds he discovered. This way they were all connected. Ven and Van were twin brothers. Van was the eldest and in line for their father's throne. All of Xanthitar were expecting both twins to have the Power but when it didn't come to Van they shunned him and kicked him out of the palace. Ven didn't have this problem, he recieved the Power.
Van was upset that they kicked him out, that was his throne when his father died not Ven, Van was the eldest. Now he had to sit there and watch his younger brother recieve the throne, well he wouldn't do it.
Since the White Power wouldn't come to him he decided to embrace the Black Power. Although White Power doesn't come to everyone, Black Power is always there for anyone who wants it.
Black Power is much stronger than White Power, Van keeps telling himself, which is true, but Van was still not satisfied. Van was still jealous of Ven, Ven still had the throne. Van decided it was time to put an end to his little brother. That is all of my ideas for the story...and I'm still not sure exactly to what the White Power and Black Power is. If you want to help me write the story then post a paragraph of former writting you have done to show me how good you are.
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10:26pm Jan 28 2011
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I'd help for free, It'd be fun to write something with someone :) |
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9:12am Jan 29 2011
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Thanks! I don't really know how to start out the story...any ideas? Starting is always the hardest for me.
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6:56pm Jan 29 2011 (last edited on 6:56pm Jan 29 2011)
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Maybe it could be a bit about Ven running from Van and then it could do a flashback of how it happened |
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9:30pm Jan 29 2011
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Like when Van tries to kill Ven and then a flashback to when Van was kicked out?
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8:14pm Jan 30 2011
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Yeah, like that :) That would be awesome. It would be dramatic, but not overkill. |
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7:22pm Jan 31 2011
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If you guys need a third person shoving ideas and stuff in here, I can help write if either of you run out of ideas, or have writers block or something. I seem to be able to match writing styles pretty well, so... I could be helpful, maybe?
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12:16am Feb 1 2011
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That sounds fine, but you should wait for kakelover's reply :)
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4:45am Feb 1 2011
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Sure December! I always enjoy more people, I go by the saying "the more, the merrier!"
I'll post the intro as soon as possible *grabs a pencil and paper and starts to write* but I tend to loose my focus when writting, thus dragging out time I spend on it. :,
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8:07pm Feb 1 2011
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If it's more the merrier, can I join aswell?
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12:22am Feb 2 2011
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Woop woop! Writing party! ;D
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4:57am Feb 2 2011
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sure sonador!
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7:51am Feb 2 2011
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I could be an editor :) Everyone calls me a grammar nazi :p and I'm all over [in my head] this forums [really i just posted on like...five or something]. After reading your first post, it seems like you got it down, but everyone makes mistakes ;D .[you spelled jealous wrong, but i think it was just a mistype].
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3:15pm Feb 2 2011
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Yea, that was a typo. DX You can be an editor if you like, I do make a lot of mistakes...plus I am no pro at writing for I just got interested in it this year and I'm not that old.
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5:24pm Feb 2 2011
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I'll just be here to help, then :3 rMail me a piece of the work, and I'll send it back pointing out things that could be done better, mistakes, etc. :)
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3:19pm Feb 3 2011
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Ok.
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3:54pm Feb 6 2011 (last edited on 3:14pm Feb 9 2011)
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Ven's breathing came in ragged breaths, gulping for air. He has been running for some time now and he knew he couldn't keep it up for much longer.
His brother, Van, had always been a much faster runner, and since accepting the Black Power, he has become even quicker. Ven had the White Power with him, but White Power is much weaker than Black Power.
Van was catching up with him, and Ven knew his time was running out. His brown bangs covered his left eye but he left it there and let it cloud his vision. Ven slowed to a stop; he could run no further. The younger twin bent forward, placing his hands on his knees to catch his breath.
The older boy ran around the corner then stopped abruptly when he saw his twin knelt over in defeat. The corners of his lips curved up in an evil grin.
"So, you're finally giving up, eh?" Van said, "Thought Father and I raised you better than to give up so easily."
Van chuckled softly when Ven didn't reply. "You're useless, you know? Oh, you might have Father and the others fooled, but not me. Your just a weak, spineless, fool like the rest of them."
The smaller twin glared at his older brother, the boy he used to look up to.
"I don't want to fight you." Ven said boldly.
"You don't have a choice."
"Why do you want to kill me? What did I ever do to you?" Ven asked helplessly.
"What didn't you do? You are the reason I got kicked out of the castle, you are the reason Mother is dead!"
Those words made Ven remember the day when everything went wrong. The day Van was kicked out and the day Ven killed his mother.
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2:31am Feb 8 2011
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It's amazing!!! I'm usually a harsh critic but there honestly isn't anything that I can see that needs improvement except maybe to break it up into smaller chunks of text. :DD
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4:23am Feb 8 2011
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Elainie helped me with grammer XD So half of the commas are hers. I have some questions and ideas for the upcoming story posts. For the questions I have my own opinions on them but I want to hear everyone elses'. OUESTIONS 1 What is White Power? What is Black Power? How powerful should they each be?
2 How did Ven kill his Mother? Was it an accident?
3 How much time has gone by since Mother died and Van got kicked out?
4 Was the Father for or agains Van getting kicked out? Was it him or the civilians that kicked his son out?
5 Does the Father still love Van, or does he hate? IDEAS The Planet Xanthitar is a newly discovered planet. Three years ago the royal family and the civilians moved there from a planet named Aersyu, a planet where only humans lived.
Half of the civilians chose to stay behind, including young Utsia. Since Utsia and her family chose to stay behind, Ven and Van didn't want to leave. Utsia was their best friend.
However, the civilians didn't take kindly to them not wanting to leave, they were the royal family, after all. Ven and Van's mind was made up though so the magicians erased their memories and sent them to Xanthitar against their wishes.
For weeks Ven and Van had a hard time even forming sentences but soon they were back to themselves. They were told they got in a terrible accident and lost their memory that way.
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8:10pm Feb 8 2011
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bump.
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