chpt 1                        the sun was shining down upon a young black myotis as he was taking a short walk around his owners ranch.he looked across the ranch as his eyes rested on a group of young creatus one was a naturel otachi ,a blonde tesurie,and two myotis.the sepia myotis was his brotther and the cream was his best friend.he ran towards the group and was greated by his brother,"hiya haill" the female cream ran up to nuzzel her friend"well speaking of the devil what were u doing all alone hail" hail was comforted by his friends scent and looked up"well notthing just thinking and my oh my bird why are u soo smelly"hail wrinkled his nose at his brother." we were rolling in mud it was fun"spoke the blonde tesurie."ya well  actually i dunked his head in first"the cream myotis said nugging  bird."and it was not funny cloud "bird told the cream myotis"well u look better covered in it" cloud laughed , but as bird  went to reply the ground started to shake as a huge monster like machine came roaring past the group only to stop a couple tails lenght away from the creatus.the group had seen there owners monsters  only none like this. a tall human came out holding a cage and took the creature one by one as he was  about  to take cloud hail and bird jumped in the way and bit the human.it let out a screech and as if a signal the  trio  ran as far away as they could from the ranch.they turned back around and stared at the ranch from the horizon,the three looked at each other scared and not knowing what had happened.              plz comment on the story i appologize for the lenght and  if u guys liked it i will make chpt 2!!!

Theres alot of typo's and it's a bit long for just one paragraph, you should keep it going though.  If you want some free editing just let me know :) I would be happy to revise it for you.

omg thank uz all and that would be more than amazing if someone could help with tippos and such i haz gud ideas but im no good at writing im french soo that dosent help 

Itss good but as they say, you need to work on your grammer missy lol