Aftershock ~ Poem. Re-Post


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Sawtistic

4:33pm Jul 7 2010

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Aftershock

 

 

The sirens, noises, flashing lights

The screams of those in pain

 I'm lifted to brand new heights

And there I see the strain.

 

I run and try to keep the pace

In the scorching eastern sun

Sweat drips down my reddened face

That’s it I quit, I’m done.

 

The pain of illness, death, and fire

I see their strength and strife

I sit cry and truly admire

My friend who lost his life

 

I awake in my bed and gasp

 I look at my courter

Then I calm and try to grasp

 My Post Traumatic Stress Disorder
NightmareDream

10:10am Jul 14 2010

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I think the rhythm goes a bit weird at the last stanza, but other than that I did like it. Very creative. :D
enola

10:28am Jul 26 2010

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Like This Veryy Much ^^ x


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Sawtistic

5:49pm Aug 3 2010

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Thanks guys. And yeah Nightmare, I know but its the only way I cold get the topic in. Y'know? I ad recently been watching some stuff about PTSD and stuff along those lines so for my as.signment(this) I wanted to show the not so smart people in my vlas.s tat this stuff is real, not just on TV.
NightmareDream

3:36pm Aug 15 2010

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Yeah. I think that's good of you. <3
spiffehmonsterr

9:48pm Aug 16 2010

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This is really good. (: An interesting look. You probly don't even really need the last line. You can kinda get that from realizing it was a dream. And "eastern" leads us to the middle east, and a lot of people think war. Good job! But I guess if you're dealing with "not so smart people" it's a good thing you added it in.
Sawtistic

9:07pm Sep 14 2010

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'Faanks Spiffeh :3
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