Amber Eyed (My first Warrior Cats story)


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BeckyL97

12:54pm Jun 5 2011

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I don't know much about Warrior Cats, so...sorry if this story isn't very accurate.

Enjoy! Tell me what you think of it!

A sleek black cat slept under the shadow of a Willow Tree. Upon hearing the approach of another being, she opened one amber eye and looked up. Approaching her was a tall, dark grey cat with a rather long tail. Swallowtail quickly got to her feet, but her mate lay a paw on the left side of her face, where she had a large white patch of fur that was shaped somewhat like a butterfly.

"Relax, my love." he said. "You need to rest in your condition."

"How are the kits, ShadowCreeper?" Swallowtail asked her mate.

"All of them are fine." ShadowCreeper said, and pricked up his ears. "I do believe I hear them coming." Both cats turned to see two much younger ones approaching. One, the eldest, was a cream tabby. The second was a silver tabby, with a heart-shaped marking on her left hind leg.

"Mother, are you well?" the cream-tabby kitten asked. Her white-tipped tail twitched.

"I am fine, IvyWater. And as for you and your sister?" Swallowtail glanced over at the silver tabby, who lifted a paw and swatted a butterfly that was fluttering past.

"We're fine, too." She said, lowering her voice a little. "But, mother...when is it due?" As if in answer to her question. Something inside Swallowtail gave her such violent pains that she collapsed on the soft grass. Groaning in pain, she squeezed her eyes tight shut. She could faintly hear her mate talking to the two younger cats.

"MoonChaser, fetch some water. IvyWater, fetch some herbs." ShadowCreeper said urgently to the concerned felines, who rushed off to do as he asked. But Swallowtail didn't listen very hard; she was too busy enduring the massive pain.

Not long after that, Swallowtail was lying on a bed of grass and oak leaves. She was exhausted. Her mate and kits came to her, with looks of absolute joy on their faces.

"They're beautiful, my love." ShadowCreeper said. Swallowtail looked down and smiled. For by her side were not one, not two, but THREE healthy newborn kits. Two were male, and one was female. One male kit was brown all over, with darker brown paws and a darker brown patch on his head. The second male kit was pale grey and white all over. And the female kit (who was the last to be born) was Tricolour, with a black patch of fur over her right eye that looked like an oak leaf.

"What are their names?" MoonChaser, the silver tabby cat, asked. Swallowtail had been considering this for a while now.

"I'll be calling this one AutumnKit." she said, nudging the Tricolour kit with her nose. "And as for these two...the grey kit's name shall be Frozenkit, and the other's name shall be WillowKit. What do you think, my love?" Swallowtail turned to her mate.

"Nobody could think of better names..." ShadowCreeper said, affectionally licking his mate's forehead.

More coming soon, guys! :-D




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fawn

1:35pm Jun 5 2011

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Arrow

2:17pm Jun 5 2011

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A little thing about warrior cats is the last part of their names isn't capitalized.

Instead of ShadowCreeper, it would just be Shadowcreeper. Also, if you look at the pattern of names, the second part of the name is typically only one syllable; the first part usually only one. Sometimes it's flipped and can result in the last part being two and the first, one. Ex; Dustfeather. Try not to use wordy names and such.

The clan names are capitalized in the second part which is where you probably got confused. Ex; ShadowClan, WindClan, StarClan.






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BeckyL97

11:31am Jun 7 2011

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Ah.....ok. Thanks for the info, shadowfax.

Ok, I'm keeping Swallowtail's name the same, but I'll change some of the others. Here they are:

Shadowcreeper will be Darktempest

IvyWater will be Wildrunner

FrozenKit will be IceKit

AumtumnKit will be ElmKit.

Moonchaser will stay the same. And thanks for the info about the clan names, too! :-)

I'll be posting a new part to the story, soon. I hope it's a bit better this time! :-)

 

 




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BeckyL97

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It was several months later, and Swallowtail was lying peacefully near the very tree that she had given birth under. She was deep in thought. Darktempest walked up to her.

"What is it, my love?" he asked her. She looked up at him.

"I've been thinking..." Swallowtail began. "Have you noticed the one thing that every single one of us has in common?" Darktempest looked confused. He looked at her, then into the distance where his children were playing. Wildrunner and Moonchaser were both being good siblings.

"Ah...I see..." Darktempest said at last. "All of us...the kits, you and I...all have the same eyes."

"Exactly." Swallowtail said. "We all have the same amber eyes. That is why...I have decided to gve our little clan a name."

"Oh?" Darktempest asked. "And what would the name be?" Swallowtail smiled.

"We shall be the AmberClan." she said. "And may our name be known forever."

And so, the AmberClan was born. :-)




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