you guys are great, so heres the next as.signment i had..:

LOL :D XD

the requirements were:

16 lines mininum 3 metaphors 2 similies, 1 allusion, and 2 alliterations.

earthquake

I was unseeing from fever

eyes open

hands on wrinkly skin

of old buildings ages ago

I was unhearing like a lizard

ears listening

the wind was a whisper

a secret not meant for me

I was unsmelling like gr*censored*

nose stuffed

the air that crept down my throat

was a cat, ages ago

I was unfeeling like dirt

skin cold

they dug, the stone slabs that finally opened

were doors of life

But I was no longer there.

Ditch the pretty colours. Also, as a general note, formatting image poetry is an absolute nertz.

Stick to one font as well.

BIG CRITIQUE TIME:

The allusion to a poem may have been required, however, it doesn't flow as well as it needs to. Try getting a copy of "Paradise Lost" or "The Highwayman" or some Shakespearian sonnet and make an allusion to that.

Allusion, paragraph b, section 1.
The allusion doesn't have to be so obvious. For instance, an allusion to Shakespeare's famopen rapture of autumn,/the chill honesty of winter/ the hidden truthes of spring/ and the mellow p*censored*ion of summer,/ O sweet temperment.

 That'd work out to be:

"You surp*censored*ed the open rapture of autumn,
the chill honesty of winter
the hidden truthes of spring
and the mellow p*censored*ion of summer,
O sweet temperment."

LOL , i know what you mean. thing is , the teacher talked about it and he thinks its pretty cool for image poetry, so im trying to lean it to his style.. ( marks points.. tehe) I actually kind of like image poetry, so i guess its an oppiniated thing.

thanks though!

yeah, poetry is my weak point. i actually have no idea what you mean by the allusion, i know mines obvious DX 

I think he was just looking for something small, it was a two day *censored*ignment and we just started poetry XD :

Urk, thanks. (: