hope you like the first page of it p.s i suck at spelling so you will have to excuse my bad spelling. Engoy :3                                               

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                 Thump thump,thump thump,gulp. Hi my name is Clannad weird name some say but I don't care anymore. As you can
tell I am veary scard I'll tell you why but lets start in the begining. It all started when my family moved from America to
 Japan I don't know why my dad had us leave to Japan I still hate the fact of it,espeshaly sence i'm so far away from all my
friends and I don't know anyone here. I just have to make friends,I just have to hope I do. My dad told me this tell about a sacret
power that  only some obtain but I think that's a bunch of balony but my dad incests on it being true. I just agree so he dosn't go on
 and on about why it is true and why i'm roungh so I leave it at that.
          the story goes like this back when the world started the gods gave the humans powers to save the inasint and protect there
loved ones. Some of the powers are becomeing a master with swords,another with guns and knives,the power to weald fire,water,and all the other elimants,and many more. Well the gods told the humans to weald this powers for good and pa$$ on the powers to ther familys generation to come and so forth,but some times people got the powers just by being chosin as someone who will use the powers for good and not to harm
others. But some people use it for bad and kill others for the fun of it and now we need more to save the world,more then ever. My dad said
I could be one of them but yet again that just a loud of balony to me and that could never happen.
          I just moved to Japan a month ago my dad incisted on me going to my new school today so I did as he told. I hated the fact that I had
to go to a new school in a new contrie far away from where I once lived at. But for some resson I didn't argu and whent. I walked in the cold brezze slowly to where I  would start going to I walked slowly step by step I came closer to the school I will sart to come to every day.
I was fritind,tarafid,but it was to late I was in the front of the school and I will have to come in that school,Thump thump,thump thump,gulp.
I can't i'm to scard what if they make fun of me and don't like me,what if I don't make any friends. Zwesh. Hay!
Ah!! I gulped a big breath of air.
  "Oh i'm sorry I didn't mean to scare you,you ok?" A Pretty girl about the size of me with strait purple hair up to her sholder with a little white
bow on the side.
   "Ahhh....ah it's ok you just starteld me." I said puffing for air.
"Good to know that I didn't scare you that bad. You look like your new to this school."
     "Well i'm new to this contrie."
   "Oh where are you from then?" She asked with a quriase face.
 "America,um....Wha what's your name?" I asked
     "Oh well my name is Su. What's yours?"
    "Um mine is...it's Clannad."
Huh. "Do you hate it!!?? (I puffed my face) well not like I care or anything."
   "No no I don't hate it I like it,it's just...just,just never mind but I didn't mean to make you mad or anything! I'm,i'm sorry if I did." She said with a sigh.
  "Sorry about that I..I I'm normaly veary shy why am I so opend up with Su I just meet her." Ding! Ding!
That's the bell we should hury up. Ya. 
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And I hope you like the sacand page tell me if you whant to read more of this story.

                      I walked at the side of Su up the old stone stairs,I was looking around trying not to look to out of the ordenary but I was to
scard I was turning alittle red I could fell the hotniss on my face.
   "You ok!?" Su said.  "No no i'm ok." where is cl*censored* 2-4 at though I don't know really where anything is." I said shiley.     
 "That's awsome! I'm in the same cl*censored* we can walk together." Su said with a big smile on her face. Su winced,ohhhhhh. "What is it Su?"
"Can you stay in the front of the bathroom for a while I need to go really badly?" Su said trying to pee her self. "Uh..hay."
  "Great i'll be back!" Su said runing while waving going into the bathroom. I pressed my back agenst the wall and slide to the ground,I can't balive
I already made a new friend.
   "Hay why are you just laying there?" A tall actualy a cute boy with the same hair color as mine,but with blue eyes. I looked up and said
 
  "Um...I am waiting for my friend."  "Oh" he said with a smile. He pold out his hand. "My name is Kyou. What's yours?" he said with a smile.
 "Uhh...my name is Clannad." I said quiatly.
 
      "Huh...it's better then mine yours isn't veary coman." he said with a little giggle.  "Clannad i'm ba..." Wosh Su pushed herslef back in the
bathroom I think Clannad has a crush on a boy already Su thought in her head with a smile.
 
   "Did you hear something?" I said "No I didn't,well we should head to cla$$ Kyou said,holering back "See ya!" I toke a big sigh,and then
blushed wow and I already have a crush on a boy.  "You still there Clannad!!??" Su halerd.  I looked up at her and smiled. I got up and both of
us rushed to cl*censored*. I gasped for air "Don't walk that fast next time Su it's hard to ceach up to you when you do that." I said still gasping for
air.
  "Oh i'm sorry Clannad next time i'll go slower,ok." Su said.  "Thanks."
 
         "Every one sit down we have a new student that moved here from America!!" Mr. Houng Said sturnly.  
 "You may come in now." Mr. Houng said. I slowly turned the nabe to room 2-4 and pushed the door open and slowly walked in the cl*censored*room next
to the teachers desk and faced twords the cl*censored* I quickly scaned the room and spoted Su siting at thet Desk over from the one near the window,the desks are two seated ones but Su had to share a seat with another pirson. Then I sow him it was Kyou his desk was right next to Sues desk he was sitting near the window. He was gazing out the window with deep blue eyes,I blushed alittle. "Gulp m..my name is Clannad Shen I look forweard to being in this cl*censored*." I said trying to sound prazentable.
         "Well Clannad take a set next to Kyou at the far back near the windows." Mr. Houng said.  "Ya...yes sur." I said softly.
 I walked step by step to my seat I knew every one was looking at me but I knew for a fact that Kyou wasn't he was still gazing his deep soft
blue eyes out the window. What is he staring at?? I thought to my self. I pulled out the seat and sat down next to Kyou. I Gulped and tryed
not to blush.  I disided to look out the window and stair out and try to see anything Kyou might be stairing at. I sighed and thought I can't balive I already have a crush on a boy I have a friend and there both in the same cl*censored* as me and best of all one of them sits next to me and the
other sits in the desk next to me what chould be better then that? Kyou was still staring out the window spacing out and not paying atention of the teacher but then I looked down and sow something he had a little bit of fire coming out of his hand it wasn't really that notisable at all maby just maby that story my dad told me was true maby there is such a thing maby Kyou is one of them.
   But I i'll just have to find that out after school.
 
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Ehh. The spelling was.. distracting. x3 Perhaps you should at least look into getting a program with a spell-checker; I imagine it would help quite a bit. Your grammar also has some problems, but I doubt you want a grammar lesson. xD A few more commas here and there could certainly improve things though. It's not entirely reliable, but try reading things aloud - where your voice tends to automatically pause, there'll usually be a good place for a comma. It won't fix things like run-ons, but again, it should at least help.

Right. On to the actual story.. At parts it seems to move overly quickly, but overall it's all right. Some definite potential, despite that I usually don't find these sorts of plots very interesting. x3 I'd say mostly, as with anything, you just need practice. The more you write, over time the better you'll become.

Thanks for the advise Youshi.:3 LOL I don't like that kind of plots too...just couldn't think of anything,that's all I could think of.

Why I suck at spelling so badly is probable because I am only 11 and well all my family pretty much sucks at spelling. LOl!