Yeah... It's freeverse xD

One night I fell asleep

And now I can’t wake up

I’m trapped in a tangled mess

But what if this dream is reality?                        

What if the life I had before was a dream

And now I’m starting to wake up?

I’m stuck here

Is it dream or reality?

Then if this “dream” is “real”

I want to go back to sleep

I want to dream my life away

Because truth is too hard to accept

Where is the line separating

Dream from reality?

I can’t find or draw the line myself

What is “dream” and what is “reality”?

What if there is no such thing

No such thing as “real”

Maybe everything is a dream

Don’t even think of escaping

From this cage in my mind

Maybe I’m the only person in existence

And living in this world is my dream?

And when I wake up there’ll be nothing

Nothing but reality?

I’m stuck in an endless dream

Or in a cycle of endless reality

I don’t care which is which anymore

They’re both equally confusing…

So was everything a dream?

Or is everything I’m “dreaming” reality?

I’ll never know

I’ll never know…

One thing: Amazing !!

This bit bothers me:

"One night I fell asleep

And now I can’t wake up"

'One night I fell asleep'. That's in the past tense.

'And now I can't wake up'. That's the present tense.

It doesn't sound right to me, even if you were trying to create a sense of confusion or something, it wasn't that effective.

There isn't a clear topic for each part (in fact, they aren't separated into parts). It's confusing (I bet you were aiming for that), however, it's really messy and the images are not clear (there are barely any images in fact). It's a nice concept, but the presentation is very rough and it needs alot to clearly show your audience what you want to show them. These are just a pile of thoughts put in the form of a poem, but you haven't really formed a connection between you and the reader. So grab all them thoughts and clean up this poem 'kay? ;D

Oh yeah,just a thought I had. It would be nice if you had a few stanzas, each stanza should be separated into halves and each half should show either images of reality or images related to dreams. It'll give it a really saucy contrast in my opinion and help pull this poem up a notch. Also suits the ti
tle better.

Ping~ Thanks for all your comments. I really like an honest critic xD Yeah.... This is far from my best work poetry-wise. I mean, I don't really do too much poetry, honestly. Actually.. This particular poem I found randomly in my older word files... It's not a great poem, but I liked the concept. I'm thinking of changing it a lot and maybe adding some rhythm and maybe rhyme if I feel like it...

Omigosh I messed up the tenses O.O -shoots self- Thanks for pointing that out. O.O

Yeah, I know it's not clean at all. It's more of brainstorm, right? ;3