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11:26am Aug 27 2011 (last edited on 7:12am Aug 28 2011)
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(This is a random piece I felt like writing, I'm not sure if it's supposed to be a poem or a story or what! Enjoy!) Prologue: She Have you ever felt alone? So alone that you feel like you will never ever find anyone who understands you, so alone that it's as if you're not really there. Have you ever been in such a state where you're not sure what's real and what's not, where you have forgotten how to react to things, forgotten how you're 'supposed' to feel? Have you ever felt forever alone?
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11:44am Aug 27 2011
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( Here's the next part, Please post a comment on what you think!) If you have, you would've probably noticed a tiny figure darting though the woods late on a somewhat enchanted night, had you have been there. But then, the figure probably wouldn't have come if it had known someone was to be glanceing upon the pale cloak that surrounded it. If you have truly felt forever alone, then you would have noticed her, for it was a she, and she too had felt forever alone before. She had felt it many times creeping through her body, ready to fully embrace her and take her away. Not only would you have noticed her, but she would have noticed you, as people who have been forever alone will sense eachother's presense no matter how short their encounter is.
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1:02pm Aug 27 2011
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(I'm sorry the parts are so small, I just like the satisfaction I get when I see the story posted for people to read! Please remember to post a comment, I prefer critisism, but compliments are good too!!!)
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1:21pm Aug 27 2011 (last edited on 5:08am Aug 28 2011)
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The woods were an unwelcoming place, not much is known about what goes on in the woods at night, afterall, who would want to find out? Most is assumed, a religion created to keep people's curious questions away. It is most likely that you belive that when night falls in the woods the hedgehogs snuffle around for tasty worms to eat, the fox scavenges for it's supper or hunts unsuspecting prey, bats, badgers, the nocturnal reign is upon the forest untill dawn. The whole world apart from a few isolated people accepted this 'religion' as fact, she, the tiny figure, was a person who did not.
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5:12pm Aug 27 2011
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This is uber epicness. x3 Not to criticise, but I think it's spelt 'religion', and the second line of the first post, 'your' I think is meant to be 'you're', i.e. 'you are'. Othewise, very well written, gripping, and of overall good quality. ^_^ Keep it up! 83
Well now. I should... Probably put something intelligent here. At some point. Eventually.
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5:12am Aug 28 2011
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Thanks for the comment! I've never been very good at spelling!!! Have you got any ideas for the girls name and age?
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5:24am Aug 28 2011 (last edited on 7:05am Aug 28 2011)
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The hooded figure Through the ominous shadows like a motorbike through traffic (although much quieter.) She loved the woods like no other, even though she new the woods was not a thing to love, it's full of secrets that could easily destroy her, spying creatures around every corner. Yet there was something that drew her to it, and when night fell she would always return under the cover of darkness to her beloved wood.
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7:26am Aug 28 2011 (last edited on 7:27am Aug 28 2011)
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(I hope you enjoyed the prologue, here's the start of the first chapter!) Chapter 1 Paw Print Alex awoke to the dim light of his old room, following immediate regret. If only he was still asleep, in the calmness of his dreams, his latest one involving Alice, just her, staring adoringly into his eyes and smiling, like an angel. And then another, rather more sinister, dream about the woods, at night.
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8:32am Aug 28 2011
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He lay in his bed, eyes closed, his hands on his chest clutching the pale feather that held all of his childhood memories, all of his feelings, all of his hopes and dreams that now seemed so far away. He did not know what he had to live for now, life was so much better before the divorce, so much happier, so much brighter. Then after that his life just disintegrated into this, nothing. A tiny fragment of what it once was, like a feather. Alex hated his stays at his old house with his Dad. His father was always so busy, and no matter how much Peter tried to make his son's stay enjoyable, to Alex nothing ever seemed the same without Mum.
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11:04am Aug 28 2011
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Hmn, I'm not really sure. She should be fairly young, and name-wise... something mysterious.... I have no idea what, though. >.<
Well now. I should... Probably put something intelligent here. At some point. Eventually.
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12:19pm Aug 28 2011
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Okay, I'll have a think. She's not Alice by the way! Maybe she shouldn't have a name. And she's got to be roughly the same age as Alex, so in late teens.
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2:24pm Aug 28 2011
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This is good. You should roleplay. :3
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4:18pm Aug 28 2011
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^I agree with the above post.
Well now. I should... Probably put something intelligent here. At some point. Eventually.
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7:50am Aug 29 2011 (last edited on 7:52am Aug 29 2011)
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(I'll see what I can do with role play, most of the things on there are about Harry Potter though!) Deciding it was no good lying in bed the whole day and pretending to be ill once again, Alex dressed himself and stood in front of the mirror. Yet another dreadful day. His head ached at the thought of it, each minute was one step closer to the day he couldn't face, the day he had been dreading ever since he was aware of it. He wouldn't be surprised if he had broken down and cried at that very moment, he just wanted to run away from everything and disappear into oblivion. A few weeks ago it wouldn't of been this way, in fact it had been the opposite. Back then was probably the happiest few weeks of his life. He would have been looking forward to school, rushing to get on the bus. Until one day when he sat in the usual seat next to the only girl he ever cared for. But when he saw her face, he immediately new something was wrong.
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9:38am Aug 29 2011
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Then thou shall do a fantasy rp with the Ty. No Harry Potter business involved.
Well now. I should... Probably put something intelligent here. At some point. Eventually.
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1:10pm Aug 29 2011
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hannah! x
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3:32am Aug 30 2011
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From the moment Alice opened her lips Alex was dreading the worst, but then came something he didn't expect. ' Next Month,' Alice paused, almost unable to continue, 'I'm emigrating to America' For a few, surreal moments there was a silence in between the two, both of them staring into each others eyes, (This made Alex believe it was a dream even more than before.) Until at last Alice spoke, so quietly that you could barely hear her, ' I'm sorry' And suddenly Alex realized that this definitely wasn't a dream at all, it was all to real, soon, he would have to loose Alice forever.
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3:36am Sep 1 2011
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And so, here he was, on his way to school having to spend his last few days with Alice. He know he should be cherishing the time that they spent together, but he couldn't when every time he looked at her it made him think of what would happen after she was gone, how would he cope?
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