You're doing a bit better, but take out the "Fine, Flammable" and the "Thanks". Chances are, unless the reader is autistic, they're going to understand that the second sentence is sarcastic and not to be taken seriously. The extra stuff you included is just overkill, really.
"The scene was a gloomy one. The few trees still standing lacked foliage, and their gnarled roots dug into the barren earth. A la
yer of grey clouds shielded all life from the sun's nurturing touch, and, given the state of things, it seemed the sun had for long not seen her child. The dirt had the texture of dust and was easily carried by the harsh wind, whose cold pierced through the armor of travellers. It was a sight that would depress any p*censored*erby."
For this example, the first and last sentences are pretty much unnecessary. The deion pretty much describes the place as gloomy and depressing, so outright saying it just seems redundant and insults the reader, who could likely understand the mood without you telling them. The first one may be acceptable as a sort of introduction, although it would be better to say something like "Our protagonist surveyed the area", otherwise the reader may be tempted to skip the whole deion. The last sentence could be okay if the next sentence built off of it (something like "But our protagonist was happy to be closer to reaching his kingdom"), but in that case it would be better off starting the next paragraph.
If you're a good writer, you shouldn't always have to tell your reader what's happening. They should be able to figure it out for themselves.
Also, really consider getting cheaper notebooks. You don't have to go to Dollar General to find something cheaper. Five dollars for something to write in is kinda pricey.