Firstly: presentation. I'm sure you probabably have it seperated into paragraphs on the document you write on but please make sure you break it up into proper paragraphs here. It's hard to read and people, like me, won't put in the effort to look through it. Yes, feel flattered that you do have people who do take the time to read and be flattered but regardless of that make sure you present it nicely.
Oh wait, I just realised you're going to fix it later |D never mind, ignore what I said. Right now I'm just skimming through it. I'm not entirely sure if you're looking for critics or just want people to read it. If it is the latter then I will say no more. Because I don't want people getting annoyed at me agai-*shot*