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my sad poem


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Fox

9:15pm Apr 26 2009 (last edited on 9:16pm Apr 26 2009)

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I lower my head
I let out a sigh
Why can't i have friends
I started to cry
Is it my personality
Am I really that shy
Holding in my emotions
On the inside I die
Watching others walk near
A tear in my eye
Everyone else has friends
And i wonder why

 

please post what you think of it



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Fox

9:33pm Apr 26 2009

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i wrote it because everyone ignores me in the sound box  Frowntle="Frown" />


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Fox

10:41pm Apr 26 2009

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everyone ignores me here too


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Fox

11:53pm Apr 26 2009

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F: Fun memories shared
R: Respect for one another
I: Inseperable bonds
E: Emotional comfort
N: Never-ending love
D: Dancing around

my other poem



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1ran

5:36am Apr 27 2009

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You should seek out friends, not wait until they look for you.
eclipseluvr22

9:02am Apr 27 2009

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You shouldn't feel that people ignore you. You just have to go after them instead of letting them go after you. If you want something, go get it.



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    1ran

    6:39pm Apr 27 2009 (last edited on 6:40pm Apr 27 2009)

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    xc That's what I said.

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    How about this, randomly rmailing a person and start a random conversation. That's how I got some of my friends. xD



    Raru

    3:03am Apr 29 2009

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    While I don't like the rhyming pattern of the first poem (well I guess I shouldn't comment because I don't really like rhyming poems that much now), it's at least consistent with the rhythm. Furthermore you should remember that a punctuation and structure of a poemar important so don't hesitate to put a question mark on the line 'Am I really that shy'. Because in my opinion, it looks awkward. not going to comment on the subject matter because I'm not fond of it though so toodles~




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