I'm extending the limit again so more people have a chance to enter. The new date is......June 1st.

Reddaysi: I'm not sure, but maybe something about Bur the Omni, a famous explorer and respected far and wide, goes on a quest to find the Treasure of Atquati. Bur finds the treasure, but it is guarded by two Narwis: a ginger female Narwi named GingerTopaz (nickname is Topaz) and an Orchid male Narwi named RusticFlipper (nickname is Flipper). A younger Narwi, a trance male Narwi named DarkestDepths (nicknamed D) helps Bur get the treasure, which turns out to be the only other Omni egg in existance.

I'll do something if I have the time.

Would you mind if I used Bur, Aurora, DD and maybe a few made-up creatu?

Yay, more time <3  Thankies Becky! :D

 I think i'll be done with the story in about 1-2 more days. No time ><"

prinxess:Of course! But if you want, you could perhaps introduce AuroraGirl's brother, a black male Ahea named Galzzra. He's a bit dim-witted but he's sweet all the same. But you don't have to put him in there if you don't want to. :-)

Dragwolf: Ok! :-)

Other information: The Omni's name is Bur, so maybe it could first meet it's friends when they find it abandoned with a plant thorn stuck in it's foot? Then AuroraGirl and DarkestDepths could help it and that's how they become friends. But it's okay if you can't do that. :-).Ill go based off what you said here <-------

1,210 words so far.

That's my longest story ever!

And it's only 3/4 done!

Finally, the 4,360 word story is done. I hope you like it, Becky! I hope the rest who read it like it too! ;3

 Here's the link to the actual story on my writing website:

http://aristories.wetpaint.com/page/Bur+the+Omni+II

Thankies Faxy, And look! It's blue! :D

*Huggles blue text*

Blue is my favorite color. o-o

*grabby-hands blue text*

I like this one better, though. <3

DONE!!!

It's only 2,215 words, but...

Here it is! :D

*ti
tle coming later*

Inside a small, tight cage, two Omni’s huddled together for warmth. It was very chilly in the cage, but the Omni’s were trapped by humans and had no choice but to stay. One day, the Mother did a massive shudder, and out popped a gold and purple egg with a red diamond in the middle, and the mother sighed. The Husband smiled and together they kept the egg warm. About one year later, the egg hatched into a beautiful, male, natural Omni. His first words where “Bur…” And the parents laughed and smiled. They had a name for their child. Bur. But then, the humans came, and did the unthinkable. They rose up two, sharp knives and cut off the ribbons on the Omni, and the Red Gem. The Red Gem was what created the first Omni, and when it was created it had the Red Diamond was on the first Omni’s head. When the Red Gem turns black, the Omni would die. So cutting off the Red Gem meant death for Bur’s family. They died quickly with no pain, which made Bur happy, but he still longed to be wrapped up with them in a cuddle once more. The humans sold their ribbons and Red Gems, which made Bur sick and furious, but then, they did what made Bur burst, and they stuffed his parent’s body with fake stuffing. He couldn’t take it. He used his strong legs to kick the bars into a deformed shape and got out. Bur wasn’t evil, so he didn’t kill any humans, but broke everything he saw. Then he saw a sharp knife lying on the ground, with a little of his parent’s blood on it, the last of his parents. He picked it up, and he ran out into the open, smelling the air for the first time. He was free, at last.

Bur twirled around, letting his gold ribbons fly around in the wind. He leaped up, and sent them flying around him in a frenzy of gold. He sang out to the world, “I’m free!” over and over again. Then he rose up on his white legs, and leapt across the green grass, smashing a few flowers into the soft, green foliage. He was having so much fun that he didn’t even notice the gaping mouths and the wide eyes of near people. He simply laughed and began twirling again. Suddenly he tripped and looked up. In front of him, was a crowd of smiling people looking at him with eager eyes. “Do more.” He heard a boy whisper. He looked back at them and sighed. Finally he got up and jumped into the air, and even though he was terrified, he slowly flipped in the air, and landed with a soft thud. People clapped and clapped. That’s when his parent’s kidnappers came out.

Bur took off, not trying to dance but couldn’t help but twirling every few minutes. He kept going until he reached the lake, where he stopped and looked around. Finally he sighed and leapt into the lake, where he furiously paddled with his white hind legs. The evil people stared at him in disbelief in their eyes. They shouted a few curses before turning away and stomping back inside. Bur sighed and began to head back to shore, but stopped dead when a pink shape flew in front of him. And to Bur’s surprise a little pink head popped up. It can’t be alive, can it? Bur wondered. But, it was. He knew that when it spoke. “Hello there stranger, I’m AuroraGirl, but you can call me Aurora. Who are you? By the way, you’re a wonderful dancer. I was watching you.” Bur blushed a bit. “I’m Bur. Nice meeting you, but I must go…” Aurora interrupted. “Where are you going? Why are you going? Can I come?” Bur sighed and thought for a minute. “I’m going…” he swallowed before answering. He thought for a second and responded. “I’m…I’m going to Uldavi. Yeah. That’s it. I’m going because I need to get away from…something, and no. You may not come, because Ahea can’t survive on land.” Aurora stared at him and then burst out laughing. “Uldavi, that’s priceless! You must be crazy!” Bur swallowed, realizing how stupid he must sound. “Yeah, I am crazy,” he admitted. “But I honestly have nowhere to go. And if you can find a way to travel out of water, you are welcome to come with me to…wherever.” Aurora smiled a bit. “Well…I do have this.” She lifted up a bottle of odd, slimy green stuff. “What’s that?” Bur asked, disgusted. Aurora spoke softly. “I have the only Uilus morphing potion in all of Rescreatu. So if I drink it, we can go.” Bur smiled. He had a traveling partner.

Aurora quickly slurped down the potion, and green sparkles flew around her. Suddenly, a flash of white light lit up the lake. Aurora was a Uilus! They began swimming across the bare, blue lake, when they looked into the depths and screamed. Something was moving! It had shiny pink, yellow and blue spots, a long silver horn, amber eyes, and was pitch black. Aurora knew that shape. It was a Trance Narwi! The Narwi poked his long horn out of the water. “Hi, I’m DarkestDepths, but you can call me DD. Do you need anything?” Aurora shook her head. “No, but if you could give us a map to Uldavi,” Aurora stopped, laughed at bit, and winked at Bur before continuing, “That would be great.” Bur blushed a bit. He found himself slightly crushing on this hyper Ahea. DD looked at them. “Well, I don’t have one of those. But I can give you this map.” He passed a brown piece of paper over to Bur. “It’s a map to the Cave of Wonders, and if you make it to the end of the cave, there is a blue stone which can grant you one wish.” DD winked, “and I think I know what you’re going to wish for. That your parents didn’t die.” His small amber eyes gleamed with a mysterious twinkle for a moment. Bur quietly asked, “How do you-“but DD was gone.

Bur quickly unraveled the map. The map first showed a picture of the lake, then a picture of a long, twisting road, then of a deep gorge, of a volcano, and finally a picture of a large black cave. “Well, let’s start off at the road.” Aurora suggested. Bur nodded and they got out of the lake, and stepped onto a dirty, brown path. The path was about five miles long, and after about one mile, both were exhausted. They stopped and rested, and looked up at the starry night sky. Two stars were bigger than the others, side by side. A tear fell down Bur’s white face as he pointed to those two stars. “I hope that’s my mom and dad, Aurora. Some humans killed them.” He shook violently, picturing the humans with the knife held tight in their hands. “I hope their watching me. But soon, I’ll know for sure their watching me, with the help of that blue stone. Well, we should go to sleep now. Goodnight, Aurora.” Aurora looked at him and blinked. “Goodnight.”

They woke up at about dawn. Bur and Aurora stretched. They started walking up the long, twisty road when Bur stopped and fell to the ground. Aurora rushed over. “What happened?” She asked. “I-I-I have a Burr stuck in my foot!” Aurora quickly yanked it out and they walked on silently for about an hour until they came across a steep drop. A bug suddenly flew in Bur’s eye and Bur took a large step back and fell over the side. Aurora spread out her wings and jumped down, picking up Bur, and racing back to the top. They looked at each other lovingly for about five minutes and then Bur spoke. “Thanks, for saving me back there.” Aurora nodded and picked him up again, and carried him to the other side of the gorge. Aurora dropped him on the other side and they walked for about an hour until they came to a big, rocky mountain with little steam rising from the top. The two set off, heading for the top. When they got there, red hot lava was gurgling and sputtering at the bottom. “Don’t drop me.” Bur teased. “I won’t.” Aurora promised. They flew safely across and went down the side, back on to yet another dirty, brown road. This road stretched on, and on, and on…until they reached a big black cave. Bur ran ahead and tried to run inside, but Aurora held him back. “We have to rest.” She told him quietly, “alright.” Bur muttered. They curled up together under the stars, and dozed off.

Bur woke up early and prodded Aurora in the stomach. “Wake up!” He screamed. Aurora raised her head and they went into the cave. It was dark, slimy, and foul smelling. As they traveled onward, Aurora stopped and looked at Bur in the dim light. “I like you, Bur, I really do. Do you like me?” Bur swallowed, and then answered. “Yes, yes I do.” They walked on in silence until they reached a large cavern, where a masked figure was standing, holding the blue stone in his ghostly hands. “So, you’ve come for the Sapphire Of Wishes, eh? Well you’re not getting it!” He shrieked. He spun around and his face was visible. He was black with dark golden eyes, long purple horns, two large scars over his eyes, a stitched mouth, and a thick black cloak covering his ghostly body. A black Jaaku! Bur leaped, so did Aurora, but the Jaaku slid over as if he’s been doing this for years. He thrust out his ghostly hands and a mysterious glow appeared, formed into a ball, and hit the two, knocking them out, and the world went black.

When they opened their eyes, the Jaaku was standing before them, an evil smirk on his face. “Do you want to challenge me again?” He asked. “Yes.” Bur said confidently. Suddenly, he grabbed the knife that was hidden in his rack of ribbons atop his head, and jabbed the Jaaku, who fell down. He was unconscious, but not dead. Bur quickly grabbed the gem and closed his eyes, picking his words carefully. I wish my parents were never killed, and are right by my side right now. A magical sparkle floated around the room, and his parents were next to him in a heartbeat. “Mom, Dad…” They were smiling, and soon they were all hugging, even Aurora. “Who’s that Uilus?” Bur’s Mom asked. “Actually, I’m a Ahea, I just had a Uilis morphing potion which I used so I could come with Bur to get the Sapphire Of Wishes,” she shook Bur’s parent’s hands, “nice to meet you.” Then they all sat down and told the story of their adventure. Bur’s Mom tossed a Blessed Flower over to the Jaaku, and they all ran out in a heartbeat, in case the Jaaku wanted revenge for taking the Sapphire Of Wishes. After a three night travel, they managed to get back to the lake. When they got there, Aurora looked at him, a sad gaze in her eyes. “I guess this is goodbye.” She said, blinking away tears. Slowly Bur leaned forward, and Bur’s eyes widened in surprise. It only lasted for a few seconds, but Bur wanted it to go on forever. Aurora turned around and leaped into the water, her legs becoming flippers and her wings dissolved. She gave one last final sad gaze at Bur, then swam off. “Wait!” Bur’s Mom called. Aurora turned around and went back to shore. “Yes?” She said questioningly. “We have an idea.” She looked at Bur’s Dad. “We have a plan.”

The three of them worked and worked until they had a neat, but large, pile of wood sitting on the shore. After much work and time, they made a small hut on the shore of the lake. “We are going to live here, and then Bur can visit Aurora whenever he wants.” Bur’s Mom said sweetly. Bur leaped into the water and they hugged. Every morning Bur leaped into the water and they talked and played until Sunset, and then Bur went to bed, and it started all over again. One morning Bur brought his parents outside with him, and he cleared his throat and spoke. “Aurora, the more I think about us being apart, the more I want us to be together. Will you, marry me?” Aurora smiled, and cried tears of joy. But suddenly her face dropped. “But, you can’t live on water, and I can’t live on land, how…” Suddenly a cloud of sparkles whirled around her, and legs formed where her flippers used to be. She stepped out of the water, clearly shocked. They hugged and hugged, and then lied down on the shore, side-by-side, looking up at the stars. They pointed at stars, seeing the constellations. To Bur’s surprise, the two big stars weren’t there anymore. “They really must have been watching over me.” Bur murmured. They slowly closed their eyes and dozed off, and darkness took over.

The end.

Hey there becky I'd love to enter your contest! Since you've filled out forms for others can you do this one for me?

 Main Characters (including Bur of course <3 ) : 

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That's all I need to write you a good story, but if you'd like to include anything else you'd like to see, then feel free to do so!