11:51am Jul 31 2010
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Intorduction-Getting to know the characters and setting- Mianna, pronounced-Me Yanna Mianna is a typical 15 yearold girl, she has a crush on a 16 yearold boy named Renidi. She has a 13 yearold sister Miama. And Renidi and herself both go to Ashly Highschool. Miama, pronounced-My Amma Miama is a 13 yearold girl who is the younger sister of Mianna. She contantly bugs and tonts her older sister about Renidi. She also has joined a club at her school Ashly High, in role play. Renidi, pronounced-Ren Id die Renidi is a 16 yearold boy. He is the calm, emo type. He also has a secret of his own. They all live in Canada, Mianna and Miama's parents are both under cover FBI agents that catch the colprets in states and countries all over the world. That means that the girls are constantly moving. They meat Renidi in Canada, at Ashly High school. Enjoy, Commant, and Rmal me!
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12:08pm Jul 31 2010 (last edited on 4:53pm Jul 31 2010)
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Chapter-1 "Watch out Johny!No no no...Watch out Johny?" Miama walked threw out the house practicing for a new play shes doing at school. "Oh just shut the heck up!" Mianna scowled as she stood in the bathroom preparing her hair for school. Miama sighed and slouched down as she walked to the bench for her backpack. When they were both done they went outside and began walking down the dirt path towards there school. "Renidi, Renidi, Mianna likes Renidi!" Miama skipped ahead and sang a little toon. Mianna sighed and slowed down. Ever since Mianna's parents were excepted into the FBI she hardly ever got to see them. Everything seemed fine for Miama, not for Mianna though. Being the oldest was tough, and it made things even harder when your little sister didn't listen when she was supposed to. When they finnaly reached school Miama ran to her friends down at the way back of the hall. As for Mianna she went over to her friends, Antio and Resima. A few minutes later Renidi walked by with his friends and Mianna's cheeks turned blood red as he looked at her. He stopped and made a signal to his friends as they winked and walked away. He started walking towards Mianna and her friends giggled and walked away. There infront of her stood her crush. He smiled and leaned up against the locker next to her, "Hey Mianna," She put her hed down and let her black hair cover her eyes, and she smiled. Hes talking to me!! Mianna thought in her head. "You wanna hang out tomorrow after school?" He got up and stood infront of her again. She lifted her head and revealed her pink cheaks and smile. "Uh, sure!" She jumped and put her stuff in her locker then ran to her friends. A small paper slid out of her locker and landed at the foot of Renidi. He picked it up and read: Renidi is my crush! It had hearts all over it and some cute little smilely face stickers. He smiled, folded the paper, put it in his pocket, and walked off to his friends.
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1:28pm Jul 31 2010
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Hope everybody liked chapter 1!!
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2:49pm Jul 31 2010 (last edited on 9:36am Aug 1 2010)
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Chapter-2 Mianna ran straight home and went to her room. She began to write in her diary. Miama soon got home and went straight to Mianna, "Hey, I'm gonna go do my.." Mianna cut her off, "Ok bye, go work!" She kept writing. Miama turned around and walked down the hall to her room, "What ever." The next morning Mianna was up early, she had already gotten ready for school and went right back to her diary to read it and write more. Miama woke up two hours after her sister and went outside to make daisy chains. When it was time for school Mianna came outside and pas.sed Miama her backpack. "Come on. The sooner we get there, the sooner the day ends." Mianna smiled and began walking down the trail. Miama pciked up her pace and walked with Mianna. Soon they reached school and Mianna went straight to her friends to talk about Renidi. And so did Miama, she went to her friends and talked about shopping and girly stuff. When after school came Mianna waited outside of Ashly High. "Go on home Miama, I'll be there later." She hugged her sister then said good-bye. Soon enough one of Renidi's friends came over and began to talk to Mianna, "Um...Renidi is going to meat you in the Black Forest. If you know where that is." Mianna nodded and walked home. I knew he was too scared to meat me outside...I'll just go home. A frown was put apon her face. Halfway home she saw a sign, it read: Black Forest-Up Ahead She looked down the trail towards the forest then began to walk down it. When she was in the forest she called out, "Renidi? It's me Mianna!" Suddenly a shadow dashed across the floor and the leaves rustled.
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5:42pm Jul 31 2010
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Hmm.... I think you should use spell chack on your chapters and maybe add more detail... but otherwise good...
"The english language has rules for a reason... Breaking them does not make you a special snowflake, it makes you an idiot..."
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9:30am Aug 1 2010
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Thanks Irissa, I could really use some people to help me recheck it and all.
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9:53am Aug 1 2010
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Chapter-3 Mianna kept walking trying to ignore the scary things around her. She tried to listen to the birds, but fear was blocking her ears. She saw carvings in the trees. One read: Go to the tree on your left And the one on her left read: Lean on me, Renidi is coming Mianna followed the directions and leaned on the tree. She heard more leaves rutle then she closed her eyes. Suddenly she felt a sharp pain on her spine. When she opened her eyes there in front of her was Renidi, he was holding her pinned up against a tree. "What are you doing Ren.." She tried to speak but Renidi pushed is dark cold lips against hers. Her cheaks turned pink and she closed her eyes. Could this really be happening? She thought. Is he really kissing me? When he pulled away he stared into Mianna's bright blue eyes. She was still pinned up as she stared into his beautiful green eyes. He smiled and so did she. Then once again he kissed her. She closed her eyes and imagened them together, this is what she always wanted. When he pulled away he unpinned her, and backed away. Mianna felt faint, this was to real, to true. She was dizzy. When she tipped over Renidi leaned to catch her. He gently set her on the gras.sy floor. He gave one last kiss on the cheak. In her sleep Mianna felt a sharp pinching pain in her stomach. Suddenly she woke up. It was dawn, the next day. She got up holding her head. When she saw a small puddle of dried blood to the side of her she panicked. She got up and lifted her shirt half way. She couldn't believe what she saw. A marking on her stomach the size of a bowl. It had curves and everything. When she looked harder she saw it was carved into a WereWolf! It was about a half inch deep. She picked her bag from beside a tree. I had the strangest dream last night...I was in a forest, and Renidi kissed me. She looked up at the tree, it said the same thing in her 'dream' last night. She looked around, she was still in the forest. She began to run home. She opened the door and screamed, "Miama!!"
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10:15am Aug 1 2010 (last edited on 11:01am Aug 1 2010)
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Chapter-4 Miama ran to the front door, "What??" She had tooth paste in her mouth. "Oh, Ok. Never mind. Lets go to school" They both walked out side and followed the dirt trail. "her u?" Miama started talking to Mianna. "What?" Mianna looked puzzled. Miama spit out the tooth past into the gras.s and then repeated, "Where were you?" Mianna skipped over a rock and then replied, "I was hanging out with my friends." Before Miama could answer back Mianna had run off to her friends. Renidi walked by and smiled. Then he walked over to her. Once again he made the signals, his buddies left, then Mianna's friends laughed and ran off. Mianna lifted a notebook over her mouth to cover her smile. "Hey Mianna. Wanna go to the park after school?" Mianna nodded her head and said, "MmmHmm." Renidi pulled down the notebook and kissed her again. Her eyes got big and her cheaks turned red. He pulled away, winked, then walked off to his friends. Antio and Resima rushed back to Mianna. When after school came Miama went over to Mianna, "Come o..." Mianna stopped her, "Go h..." Then Miama cut her off, "Go home I know! If you spend the night somewhere don't be late for school." She had an agnry ex pression and walked off. Mianna shrugged and then sat down at a bench. Renidi came over and gave her the signal to come. She went to him and walked beside him as they took the long way to the park...Threw the forest. He smiled and snuggled his hand into hers. She smiled and turned her head. When they reached the forest the sun had begun to go down. Renidi put a worried smile on his face and ran off, "I'll be back in a minute." She decided to lean against the same tree she did last night. A few minutes later Renidi came back. He ran to Mianna and pinned her again. Just like the night before he kissed her. She didn't hesitate this time and kissed back. When he realeased her she felt faint again. He cought her and gently set her down. Her eyes began to slowly close. When they closed she heard growling. Her eyes opened again, slowly they closed again. Before they were complety shut there before her she saw, A wolf howling to a full moon.
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12:34pm Aug 1 2010
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Chapter-5 Just like the night before Mianna woke up holding her head. This time there was no blood. She grabbed her bag and headed on home. The front door was open and there was a note taped on it. The note read: I'm allready at school. So no bother calling me to get ready. -Miama Mianna shrugged and walked to school. Today her friends were hanging out with Miama, she didn't bother talking to them. She opened her locker and a note slid out. She opened it and it said: Mianna, I'll meat you in the forest tonight after school. -Renidi She smiled and went to cl*censored*. After school she said bye to her friends and went to the forest. The sun was setting by the time she got there. There stood Renidi leaning on a tree waiting for her. He smiled and hugged her. She hugged back and then gave him a peck on the cheak. They both smiled. For the whole night they talked about there intrests and played with twigs. Renidi pulled out a folded paper from his pocket and handed it to Mianna. She lifted one eyebrow and looked at the paper. Her cheaks turned red and she ut it in her pocket. It was the paper with hearts and stickers on it. "I think thats yours." He smiled at her. She smiled back and nodded. She leaned back and layed on the floor. There they layed next to each other under the stary night sky. Mianna never thought this would happen, but it did. After awhile she fell asleep next to him. He got up up and ran deep into the forest. When he came back all Mianna heard in her sleep was growling, and barking. She woke up the next morning. She grabbed her bag and left, on the trail towards school. She looked towards the direction to their house, she didn't even bother to go home. She didn't want to see Miama now. She kept on walking to school. When Renidi walked by that day he had scratches across his face and so did his friends.
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8:52pm Aug 1 2010
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Chapter-6 This time Renidi and non of his friends looked in Mianna's direction, they didn't even smile or wave. And the even stranger thing was that she didn't remember anything that happened last night. Not the growling or howling. Just going to the forest. Her two friends huddled around her. "Are you two, ya know. Dating?" Resima smiled. "Uh, I-" Antio cut her off, "You two are perfect for each other!" Antio giggled and Resima joined in. Mianna shrugged, "I dunno, he seems mad. And he is all beat up!" Her friends both started pushing her towards him. "Lets go girl." Resima pushed harder. Once they pushed her close enough they ran off. "Hi," Mianna waved shyly. He looked up at her and managed to squeeze a half smile on his face. He twiched his fingers in a small wave. She looked back towards her sister, who was watching her. Miama rolled her eyes and turned back to her friends. Mianna's smile turned to a frown. "Meat me at the forest tonight. I'll be waiting." Renidi snarled and got up, walking away with his also beat up friends. Mianna let out a big sigh and went off to clas.s. After school Miama walked away from Mianna, leaving her behind. Mianna shrugged and went on the trail towards the forest. Once again the sun had begun setting when she reached the two trees with carvings from before. Suddenly Renidi came out from behind a big oak tree. With bloody gashes in his legs and arms. He collapsed on the floor infront of Mianna. She ran to him and took off her jacket. She rubbed away the dried blood, he mounded loudly because of the pain. She rapped the jacket on his leg and poored her water on it. She took her tank top off from under her real shirt and got it wet, then rapped it on his arm. She layed his head on her backpack and then layed beside him. They both fell asleep together like the night before.
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8:59pm Aug 1 2010
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Flo I love it! You left a Cliff Hanger^^ Please write more! The ONLY critisizm I have is some spelling of your words is wrong. But otherwise I love it! It needs to be published :)
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9:00pm Aug 1 2010
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lol Thanks.. I know I'm not the greatest speller. I'll add more next time.
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9:02pm Aug 1 2010
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You better^^ I am Deadly Truth's Number one Fan! *makes T-Shirt and puts it on* See?
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9:22pm Aug 1 2010
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It is awesome Flowers.
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9:04am Aug 2 2010
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Thank you so much! I'm glad to know people really like it! I am definently going to continue it.
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9:25am Aug 2 2010 (last edited on 5:58pm Aug 2 2010)
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Chapter-7 Mianna was running threw a forest with scratches and cuts on her body. She was screamming as loud as she could. There was something behind her, something big! Suddenly Mianna woke up, dripping sweat and breathing deeply. The sun was still down. She rolled over to see Renidi, to her surprise he was awake staring at the stars. She sat up and rubbed her head. "How long have you been awake?" She got up and went down to the the near by lake to wash up and get the blood off of her. He stood up slowly and walked towards her holding his arm and limping. He leaned up on a tree and explained, "Theres something I have to tell you." Mianna got out of the lake and helped him walk. They both sat criss cross in front of each other. Mianna had a puzzled look. "Last night," He began, " When I was hurt, and the day before that. When I had scratches. Those were from other peolpe. See...I'm a werewolf." Mianna got up and backed away. "I'm in love with a werewolf...I kissed a werewolf...I SLEPT with a werewolf! Oh my god!!" When he tried walking towards her he collapsed on the floor. She backed so far that she fell into the lake. Now there was a strong enough current to pull her away. She began thrashing and flailing her arms as she was pushed and pulled in the water.
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6:06pm Aug 2 2010 (last edited on 7:23pm Aug 2 2010)
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Chapter-8 The lake was deep enough to suck her head under. Everytime her head bobed back up she saw Renidi in a different place. Suddenly when she popped back up for the seventh time she couldn't believe what she saw. Renidi was gone, and a uge black wolf took his place. His fur shone in the moon light. He looked up and howled. Renidi the werewolf Looked at Mianna and growled. He leaped into the water and swam towards Mianna. Should she scream for help because of a werewolf, or should she scream for help because she was about to drown in the lake. She couldn't decide so she kept quiet. He paddled to her. Renidi suddenly disapeared under the silver water. Out of nowhere something lifted Mianna up. She looked down and she was sitting on top of the big black beast. She was about to scream but she hesitated. Renidi paddled as hard as he could. Finally by sun rise he had managed so get out of the current and climb back on land. The waters were calm. Renidi set Mianna on the ground. She choked and coughed trying to get the water out of her loungs. Renidi layed behind Mianna supporting her back, making it easier to breath. She stood up and curled next to a tree, trying to keep warm. Renidi got up, crouched low to the ground and growled. He let out a bloody bark and leaped into the forest. Mianna jumped to her feet and slowly walked behind the tre she was leaning on. A loud yelp let out, like when you step on a dogs paw. She covered her ears and closed her eyes. After a few minutes she opened her eys and uncovered her ears. She saw Renidi standing there staring atthe floor. His mouth was dripping blood and his eyes were glowing dark green. He made a deep growl and flung his head up to look at Mianna. He looked at the sun and went behind a bush. Mianna heard a small groun and looked behind the bush.
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7:27pm Aug 2 2010 (last edited on 5:52pm Aug 3 2010)
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Chapter-9 Renidi layed curled up holding his heart. His eyes were tightly closed. After a few minutes he opened his eyes and got up. He flicked his rist and told Mianna to turn around. She sighed and turned around. A few moments later Renidi began to walk down the path to school. He had changed his clothes. She ran up to him and asked, "Why were you holding your heart?' He stopped and turned aound to face her. He lifted up his shirt high enough to reveal a large cetameter deep carving right above his heart. Mianna's face turned blank as she remembered the scar on her stomach. He put his shirt back down and kept walking. She shook her face and ran up to him. Mianna went straight to her friends to talk about last night, she didn't tell them he was a werewolf she just said he rescued her. After school Miannna went to the forest before Renidi. She hid and kept quiet. She saw Renidi transform. Then he went behind the same bush. He pulled out a body. Another werewolves body. Mianna gasped and closed her eyes. The other wolf was brown with red marking and patterns on it. She looked closely at one, it read 'evil' She ducked down and watched Renidi. He grabbed the wolf in his mouth and tossed it onto the lake. Mianna felt a tear go down her cheak. When Renidi turned around Mianna was standing infront of him. His mouth opened and he growled. He transforme dback to human and began to yell, "What do you think your doing here?" Mianna stood her ground, "How could you kill another of your kind?" Renidi stood still, he had no come back.
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1:16am Aug 3 2010
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Omg. That was awsome!
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8:57am Aug 3 2010
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lol Thanks Tri!
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