I admit, I lost interest. Th more details you add, the more realistic your story will be. Remember to round out your characters, too. None of these wolves have a personality I can relate to, meaning that this will become a book that readers will put down.
Characters should be round, like a ball, where you can see them from every angle. You characters seem flat, like paprer, where we can only see one side of the character. It's quite boring, acctually.
Also, it doesn't seem very wolf-like. There is a wolf book called "The Sight," and it constantly reminds the reader that these are wolves the story is about. The characters rarely make eye contact with eachother, and the author portrays characteristics that real wolves have. HE spent alot of time researching the animals before he wrote about them. I seggest you do the same.
Also, the names seem like the names from"Warriors," and there is acctually a book about a wolf titled "Spitir Walker." When I wright, I try to be aware of these things, because, as authors, we don't want to be sued for copyright.
Hope this helps!
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