Writing for ssalee (;


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3:55pm Apr 17 2011 (last edited on 4:26pm Apr 17 2011)

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Love 

Are you willing to wait , 

or are you gonna leave me and depend on fate ?

All I wanted was for my fairytale to start ,

all you gave me was a broken heart.

Now you expect me to forgive you and take you back ,

Im gonna turn around and walk away ,

before you lead me on to think you've changed and that you love me ,

I know now that you never did anyway .

All your good for is crushing hearts , 

especially the girls who think "Oh he's the one !"

But then out of no where you say , "We're done !"

They all think , "What did I do ?" as they cry to themselves,

But the whole time it was just you .

The cycle repeats forever and ever ,

thats what happens when you fall in love .

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 Thats my first poem , if you like it go ahead comment , I'll take criticizem , dont worry , im a good sport (; But if you want go ahead and name a price too .

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 Your little fingers grasp my hand ,

wet with spit from your toothless mouth .

your little legs kick the air ,

while your head is full of short brown hair .

Your cheeks flourish with a pinky-red color ,

Then your eyes open for the first time ,

a piercing blue , just like mine .

I wouldn't change a thing ,

even if I had the chance .

I cant wait to see you shine , 

whether you draw , sing , file , or dance ,

Ill be here through good and bad .

I know once and a while you'll make me sad ,
 
 but dont think I'll ever stop loving you ,
 
 No one in the world can change that ,
 
I started loving you from you first showed up on the screen ,
 
I'll love you until my heart stops beating .
 
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timberwolf97

4:35pm Apr 17 2011

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It's good but some of your lines are a little long so it inturrupts the flow. Otherwise it's pretty good



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4:37pm Apr 17 2011 (last edited on 4:37pm Apr 17 2011)

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Aww , thanks .. I'll keep that in mind . I wasnt shooting for a rythmed kind of poem , but I will DEFINITLY keep it in mind (;



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timberwolf97

4:39pm Apr 17 2011

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you should set up a poetry blog ^0^ I did it before with google blogs but i havent updated mine since forever




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4:41pm Apr 17 2011

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Really you think so ?

 Do you think I should do a blog on Res ?

 




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timberwolf97

4:44pm Apr 17 2011

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blogs on res tend to be forgoten easily ;) if you have yahoo, hotmail or gmail, we could start a blog together or use the one that Imade but never updated :)




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4:46pm Apr 17 2011

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What if I/we started a website instead ..

 




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timberwolf97

4:50pm Apr 17 2011

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that'd be awesome :)




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4:56pm Apr 17 2011

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Okkkaay (;

 Ill start it aand give you thee addres okaay ?

 




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timberwolf97

5:05pm Apr 17 2011

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ok ^0^



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