Writing contest for my Black Ezahni. :D


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Caya

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Sure, Millinium. That's fine with me. ;3



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nightimegal101

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when do u want the stories???



Caya

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What do you mean when?



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nightimegal101

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like umm when are u going to stop asking for stories, and like umm how many days left of this contest is there????



Life

10:19pm Jun 21 2010 (last edited on 10:19pm Jun 21 2010)

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YEEK OMG SORRY I FAIL.

i shall edit it. and repost it.

X)

the golden collar?

jus something that popped up in my head.

Life

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The egg shining in the spotlight, sitting on the velvet pillow on a small table. The moonlight shone into my the room through the window behind me. All was quiet, peaceful, and nothing was there to interrupt the making of our strong bonds, one thread at a time weaving through my mind and the infant that lay within the egg. I looked at the egg with longing eyes and pictured the two of us, the majestic old green ezahni which has stood by me from the day it was born,  flipping through faded pictures of his first moments, parties, and that time would be exactly like this one. I looked at the clock. Only half a minute had gone. The egg sat still and quiet, unlike the other eggs I have hatched which show signs of life even before they are ready to be hatched. What if this egg was dormant? I thought, frightened thoughts overflowed as I thought about the innocent ezahni, dead and cold, even before he could see the moon, the sky, the earth, the world. I buried my face in my hands and breathed deeply, I had to get these horrendous thoughts out of my mind. What was I thinking?

I calmed down and carressed the egg like how a mother strokes her baby's cheeks, lovingly, tenderly, at that moment i felt nothing could tear us apart. The egg jolted, giving me a fright, a fright which turned into joy soon after, when a pair of huge amber eyes interlocked with mine. Sitting bewildered, it trembled in the cold wind, it's wet, reddish black mane sticking to her fur. I took her into my arms and held him close to my chest, her heart beating against mine, in unison, together as one. The bond we had forged just a matter of seconds ago turned into reality. I looked down at the baby, which had so quickly drifted off to sleep, exhausted from hatching out of it's egg. I reached for the velvet pillow, removed the broken egg shell and placed the baby black ezahni gently onto the pillow, careful not to wake him up. I opened the drawer and fished out a golden collar, the one i had been saving for so long. Saving for my chosen one.

Line by line I exerted much strength to carve her name deep into the shining solid gold. And there was the collar, so carefully and lovingly etched into a once empty and plain golden collar. The buckle snapped open, and i lifted her head and clicked the collar on as softly as possible. I smiled, and whispered, "what a beautiful baby" to myself. I lifted her off the velvet pillow and tucked her into my bed, under the soft, warm quilt, hand-knitted by my mother. She slept so soundly, so peacefully, her chest moving up and down gently, her mane no longer wet and soft like fine threads of silk. Tears welled up in my eyes, glad that the little baby had made it into this world alive, and this little baby i will bring with me and share my happiest memories with. I stroked her head tenderly, lovingly, and whispered goodnight, before dragging an old mattress out onto the floor to sleep, not wanting to disturb her first dreams.

The moonlight shone into the room in a straight ray, splashing her collar with pure moonlight. "Natari," i read, "Natari" 

Life

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The moonlight shown down ever so brightly on the enchanting egg, the egg for which i had given so much for. It lay still and motionless, as the clock ticked slowly just above it on the wall. 55, 54, 53...the seconds seemed like hours to me as the cold sweat ran down my cheeks, the waiting was not a problem, the problem lay with the egg's stillness, so torturous and painful it was to watch. 50, 49, 48, 47. The egg was oddly cool and still. No sudden jerks or sounds as the seconds narrowed lower, lower. 30, 29, 28, 27, 26. I cried as I thought of the possible fate of the helpless, innocent body inside, cold and still. 20, 19, 18, 17, 16, 15. I touched the egg, and pulled back my hand instantly, rubbing the fingers which had been scalded, in a futile attempt to ease the pain. The egg was immensely powerful, yet from just that one touch I knew, I just knew that the creature inside was strong and true at heart, yet still small and helpless for the days to come till it grew into adolescence, and then to an adult, when it will no longer be weak and helpless as it was before. Love and loyalty was its power. 3, 2, 1. Nothing. I counted again, 3, 2, 1! Still, nothing. I glanced at the clock hung on the wall, incubated overtime, yet motionless and dead. The egg was late. I burst into tears. I knew this meant the egg was dormant. I cradled the egg and sat on the couch. Thinking of the wonders that could have come from it. Thinking, what if it was all my fault? I killed it. I did something wrong. A tear travelled down my cheek and dripped onto the seemingly dormant and harmless egg. Suddenly I screeched as the egg turned so hot, it could have burst into flames. I dropped it on the couch and got to my feet, staring at the egg suspiciously. Something wasn't right here, the egg still had life. I had never seen a late egg hatch before. It lit up brightly and just as fast as it was alive it went quiet again. Finally there was a jerk and kick from inside. A crack opened up in the side and the small, limp body clumsily fell out onto the floor. The strange thing was, its body was jet black with a blood red mane and stockings. It lifted its small delicate head and locked eyes with mine. In those few seconds we connected. It was almost magical, like everything I knew was transfered through that stare. Like the newborn knew now everything I did and nothing was a secret. We were meant for each other. She is my lifelong partner, my loyal friend. She pulled herself to gether and pushed her body off the floor, gethering her senses and standing steady on her hooves. With no problem like any other baby would have. It stood proudly and cantered to my side and curled around my legs, letting out a sound i could not define, but encased in it was the love for her mother, which i could feel. I laid on the ground next to it and it nipped my hair playfully. That night was enchanting. I went to bed with the creatu at my heels. "Natari" I thought, "I'll name her Natari". I carried her into my arms and gently set her on a straw bed i had made the night before. She stepped on the bed, sniffed it, chewed the ends, and finaly curled up at rest. the moonlight shone through the room onto the black ezahni, sleeping so soundly, like how an angel would. 
Life

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that's the edit of your entry. X)
Caya

10:46pm Jun 21 2010 (last edited on 10:47pm Jun 21 2010)

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@nightimegal101~ I said on the first post that I was going to wait until there's a fair amount of entries. :)

@cascadianlove~ The edit of your story is great. <3 Thanks. Also, I didn't want you to copy and edit my story, it was just an example to look at for ideas. ;) Sorry if I made that unclear.




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Life

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ooh sorry caya. i mistook "needed some work"

oh well i was bored anyway. XDXDXD

Caya

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Lol. x3 That's okay.
Bump! 



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Life

9:23am Jun 22 2010 (last edited on 9:25am Jun 22 2010)

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RAWR -CAS BITES CAYA-

-NNEEEEEEIIIGH!!!!!!!!-

CAS: WHAT?

-PAUSE-

CAS: EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK!!!!!!!!!! NUUUUUU

NATARI HEADBUTTS CAS WITH HER SHARP HORN.

CAS DIES from excessive blood loss.

CAYA SITS ON NATARI AND RUN FROM THE CRIME SCENE

Caya

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Omg. I think we have a winner everyone. x3 Lol.



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rainbow12

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so i edited it.
Caya

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It still has some repetition and I also don't want Natari to be able to talk.
Other than that, it's good. :D 



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fizzyizze

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Grrr. I'm having some issues with my comp. I might be able to do this on time, but if not, I'm really sorry D:



Caya

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There's no end date, but I can probably give you a week and that's it. Can you get it done by then?



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rainbow12

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so i unenter
Caya

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Oh...okay. :P That's fine with me.



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Life

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haha. XDXD

i shall do a writeup for your TO-BE-HATCHED ALBINO EZAHNI!

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